In order to improve my English, I post this essay and I wish if someone kindly read it and give me some corrections and comments, thanks.

Topic:

Imagine that you are studying (or working) in a foreign country. Would you prefer to live by yourself in an apartment or with a roommate? Share your ideas.

Essay :

Finding a rent in the big city becomes a real problem with regards to the time and the great amount of money taken only to make an apartment search. Thus, it became so necessary to determine your expectation of lodge in order to find a compromise between price and comfort.

From my point of view concerning students, I think that living in an apartment with roommate is best than living by herself look the amount of money used by students to rent. However, it is so necessary to have the same sex the roommates in order to avoid problems and to concentrate all efforts on studies.

By the way, sharing a rent with roommate can be a benefit experience. However the benefits of this adventure can include many advantages and even decreasing cost of rent. However your relation with your roommate can be simulated to a micro society with day-to-day opportunities to develop communication, help to be responsible toward the other and evolve the sense of sharing roles at home and lasting rewards through the experience of your partner.

On the other hand, the disadvantages of living with roommates may include mainly the lack of freedom and risks of misunderstanding between them. Fortunately there are some attitudes that may avoid these inopportunity among which is the respect between roommates that it should be taken into consideration from the beginning.

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JemmaliEssay :

Finding a rent (rent is not correct; it is the payment, not the place. You can say rental, apartment (American English) or flat (British English), rented house, or place to rent.) in the big city becomes a real problem with regards to the time and the great amount of money required just taken only to make an apartment search. Thus, it became so is necessary to determine your expectations in advance of lodge in order to find a compromise between price and comfort.

From my point of view concerning students, I think that living in an apartment with a roommate is better than living by yourself because students usually are on a tight budget. look the amount of money used by students to rent. However, it is very so necessary to have a compatible roommate of the same sex the roommates in order to avoid problems and to be able to concentrate all efforts on studies.

By the way, sharing the rent (Do you mean sharing an apartment?) with a roommate can be a beneficial experience. However The benefits of this adventure can include many advantages such as and even decreasing the cost of rent. However your relation with your roommate can be compared simulated to a micro society with day-to-day opportunities to develop communication skills, help to be responsible for another person, toward the other and evolve a sense of sharing roles at home and gaining lasting rewards through the experiences of your partner.

On the other hand, the disadvantages of living with roommates may include mainly the lack of freedom and risks of misunderstandings among between them. Fortunately there are some attitudes that may avoid these problems; inopportunity among which is the respect among roommates that it should be taken into consideration from the beginning.

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