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I am currently writing my appliction letter for University College Utrecht, and I know I am not nearly done however I am a bit stuck on how to continue or what to scrap or elaborate on.

In the guideline they ask to answer these questions:
- Why would you like to study at University College
- What fields of study do you find most interesting and why?
- Do you have any relevant working experience or social activities
- What are your interests with regard to (or regardless of) your current education?
- What are your plans after finishing University College
- Are there any circumstances not evident in your application that may have affected your academic performance

And I am currently torn about how to answer the last question, I have written a very short paragraph answering this question but I feel that it will give more questions than answers. My problem is that I want to be as honest as possible in answering this question but if I explain everything it will be a letter that either nobody is going to read due to it's length or I will create the impression that I am asking for a sympathy vote, neither of which I would like to leave behind as a first impression.
The other option would be to only tell about my illness and don't mention anything else but it will leave them wondering why my academic career took such an unusual path.

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I am writing to apply for the Bachelor of Liberal Arts degree program in the Science department. At University College Utrecht I want to gain a wide scope of knowledge to better prepare for my future career as a doctor.

Ever since I was young I have had two dreams, I always wanted to become a doctor and I have always wanted to see and travel the world. But it wasn't till last year that I realized where I wanted my future to go.

In the previous academic year I became very ill, which made me think about all major decisions I have made. It dawned on me that I didn't make these decisions for myself but rather for other people. However it took a near death experience to finally realize I had to live life for myself. At that moment I felt completely powerless in a country with one of the best healthcare systems in the world. But if I felt powerless here how does someone feel who isn't blessed to be born in a world where healthcare is taken for granted. That was my moment of clarity, the moment all the pieces fell together.
Unfortunately I did not act on this new knowledge until summer, which I spent studying Spanish in Barcelona. Being alone gave me a lot of time to think about how to proceed in life and it gave me a new perspective on my future. Here I learned that even though I made the wrong decisions in the past it doesn't mean I have to continue this path. I still have time to change these decisions and work towards the future I want.

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In my life I have had multiple setbacks which have greatly impacted my academic performance. One of these was me being ill last year, however I feel that it is not possible to elaborate further on these setbacks in this letter due to the extensive nature of these setbacks.

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I would greatly appreciate all of your feedback.
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Hi Sion;
Welcome to the Forums!

Your short paragraph is excellent. The only additional things you might say are something like this:

- the illness caused me to drop out of a semester (or whatever the facts are)
- I have completely recovered, but the experience gave me an acute appreciation of life and my goals ...

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Thank you for your feedback, I have changed the paragraph a bit and added a paragraph. I think I just need a better transition between some of the paragraphs.

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Address Line 1
Address Line 2

January 30, 2011,

University College
Office of Admissions
P.O. Box 80145

Utrecht, 3508TC

Dear Sir or Madam:

I am writing to apply for the Bachelor of Liberal Arts degree program in the Science department. At University College Utrecht I want to gain a wide scope of knowledge to better prepare for my future career as a doctor.

Ever since I was young I have had two dreams, I always wanted to become a doctor and I have always wanted to see and travel the world. But it wasn't till last year that I realized where I wanted my future to go.

In the previous academic year I became very ill, which made me think about all major decisions I have made. It dawned on me that I didn't make these decisions for myself but rather for other people. However it took a near death experience to finally realize I had to live life for myself. At that moment I felt completely powerless in a country with one of the best healthcare systems in the world. But if I felt powerless here how does someone feel who isn't blessed to be born in a world where healthcare is taken for granted. That was my moment of clarity, the moment all the pieces fell together.

Unfortunately I did not act on this new knowledge until summer, which I spent studying Spanish in Barcelona. Being alone gave me a lot of time to think about how to proceed in life and it gave me a new perspective on my future. Here I learned that even though I made the wrong decisions in the past it doesn't mean I have to continue this path. I still have time to change these decisions and work towards the future I want.

After UCU I would like to continue studying to become a doctor, preferably in another country. My goal would be to apply to an Emergency Medicine residency program after finishing my post graduate degree in medicine. To getter a better idea of where I would like to continue my studies and apply to a residency program I will embark on a journey through 5 continent in May, on this journey I hope to find new experiences as I did last summer.

A better transition to the next paragraph.

In my life I have had multiple setbacks which have greatly impacted my study results. One of these was me being ill last year, this caused me to miss more than half of my classes however if I had the power to change the situation I wouldn't. Now that I have fully recovered I can see that the experience gave me a new and acute appreciation of life and my goals.

Yours faithfully,

Sion Marx
Hi Sion Marx; I've taken the liberty to make many suggestions, please excuse the heavy hand. Your writing was fine, but there might be some ideas for you to use in polishing your letter.

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Dear Sir or Madam:
I am writing to apply for the Bachelor of Liberal Arts degree program in the Science department. At University College Utrecht I want to gain a wide scope of knowledge to better prepare for my future career as a doctor.
Ever since I was young I have had two dreams; I always
wanted
to become a doctor and I have always wanted to see and travel the world.
But it wasn't until last year that I realized where I wanted my future to go.
The previous academic year I became very ill, which caused
me to miss more than half of my classes which made
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near death experience caused me to finally realize I had to live life for myself. At that moment I felt completely powerless in a country with one of the best healthcare systems in the world. But if I had felt powerless here, how does someone feel who isn't blessed to be born in a world where healthcare is taken for granted. That was my moment of clarity, the moment all the pieces fell together.

Unfortunately In spite of a full recovery, I did not act on this new knowledge until the next
summer, which I spent studying Spanish in Barcelona. Being alone gave me a lot of time to think about how to proceed in life and it gave me a new perspective on my future. That led me to the decision to apply...Here I learned that even though I made the wrong decisions in the past it doesn't mean I have to continue this path. I still have time to change these decisions and work towards the future I want.
After UCU I would like to continue studying to become a
doctor, preferably in another country. My goal would be to apply to an
Emergency Medicine residency program after finishing my post graduate degree in medicine. In May, To getter a better idea of where I would like to continue my studies and apply to a residency program I will embark on a journey through five continents - to discover where I will continue my studies in a residency program, and
in May, on this journey I hope to find new experiences and further insights as I did last summer.

A better transition to
the next paragraph.
In my life I have had multiple
The greatest setbacks which have greatly
impacted my study results. One of these was me my being ill last year., this caused
me to miss more than half of my classes however if I had the power to change
the situation I wouldn't. Now that I have fully recovered
In hindsight, that turned out to be a blessing in disguise because I can see that the
experience gave me a new and acute appreciation of life and my goals.
Yours faithfully,