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Hello everyone,

I am applying for a position at my community college. I was asked to give a brief description of myself and my background. Can you please advise the best way to word the below sentences. Also, please let me know if you guys notice any other errors (grammatical or otherwise), or if you think that these two sentences could be written better - especially sentence two. Thank you!



SENTENCE 1

a) I plan to transfer in the fall of 2020 to a four-year university and major in accounting or economics.

b) I plan to transfer in the fall of 2020 to a four-year university to major in accounting or economics.

SENTENCE 2

a) I have previous management and sales work experience in the agricultural sector, and I have also worked on projects that involved accounting and financial data analysis.

b) I have prior management and sales work experience in the agricultural sector, and I have also worked on projects that involved accounting and financial data analysis.

c) I have previous management and sales work experience in the agricultural sector. In my most recent job, I worked on projects that involved accounting and financial data analysis.

d) I have prior management and sales work experience in the agricultural sector. In my most recent job, I worked on projects that involved accounting and financial data analysis.

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For sentence 1, use B. For sentence 2, use C. But you should eliminate the word "previous" (or "prior") because it is redundant and sounds redundant. If you have experience, of course it is previous. You already have it.