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Subject: request for the grant of salary

Respected/Sir,

On December 3rd, 2018 during last period, I asked for a day's leeway from Mr Smith for the submission of the English test result. Things went a little wrong and he, in stead, asked for my resign. I was bound by my agreement and could not leave the job on my own until the end of the session but when he asked for my resign I happily did so. I was fad up by the tiering, ireksome and hard job conditions in your institute. I look upon Mr Smith's order as redumption. Before leaving Mr Smith told me that the authority will forfeit my security amount. Although, according to the rules and regulations, the authority can not do so, as I was actually fired, I accepted it. He, on my demand, promised me that the authority will pay me my November salary which he latter on refused to pay which is unjust.

My reputation as a teacher was outstanding. All my students were setisfied with my method of teaching. Since I joined the institute the students always showed good results in English on the board examination. I always proved to be a nice and helping colleagues for my co-workers; they have no complaints against me. Although I was fad up I did my job honestly and sincerely until I was working there. Keeping in view my reputation and the condition I faced on December 3rd, please release my salary. Though in the circumstances I resigned from my job the authority can not forfiet my security amount I'm not asking for that.

I hope you will look into the situation careful and will resolve the dispute sensibly, and will release my salary soon.

Thanks in anticipation.

Yours truly,

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sundarnazYour suggestions to make the appeal stronger will be highly appreciated.

When you include reprobations in a message, any appeal for a positive response is lost. After you complain and insult them, why should they do anything you request?


I have highlighted the text with mistakes. There are a lot of mistakes - especially wrong vocabulary words.

Respected/Sir,

On December 3rd, 2018 during last period, (I don't know what you mean by "period". last year? last month?) I asked for a day's leeway (deadline extension) from Mr Smith for the submission of the results from my English test result. Things went a little wrong and he, in stead, asked for my resign. (resign is a verb. The noun is "resignation." I was bound by my agreement and could not leave the job on my own until the end of the session (wrong word) but when he asked for my resign I happily did so. I was fad (wrong word. A fad is a sudden very popular activity. ) up by the tiering, ireksome and hard job conditions in at your institute. I look upon Mr Smith's order as redumption. Before leaving, Mr. Smith told me that the authority (wrong word.) will forfeit (wrong word.) my security amount. (wrong word.) Although, according to the rules and regulations, the authority can not do so, as I was actually fired, I accepted it. He, on my demand, promised me that the authority will pay me my November salary which he latter on refused to pay which is unjust.

My reputation as a teacher was outstanding. All my students were setisfied with my method of teaching. Since I joined the institute, the students always showed good results in English on the board examination. I always proved to be a nice and helping colleagues for my co-workers; they have no complaints against me. Although I was fad up, I did my job honestly and sincerely until (wrong word.) I was working there. Keeping in view my reputation and the condition I faced on December 3rd, please release my salary. Though in the circumstances I resigned from my job the authority can not forfiet my security amount I'm not asking for that.

I hope you will look into the situation careful and will resolve the dispute sensibly, and will release my salary soon.

Thanks in anticipation.

Yours truly,

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Respected/Sir,

On December 3rd, 2018 during the last period, I asked for a day's leeway from Mr Smith for the submission of the English test result. Things went a little wrong and he, instead, asked for my resignation. I was bound by my agreement and could not leave the job on my own until the end of the session but when he asked for my resignation I happily did so. I was fed up by the oppressive working conditions in your institute. I looked upon Mr Smith's order as redemption. Before leaving, [comma] Mr Smith told me that the authority will consider my security amount forfeit. Although, according to the rules and regulations, the authority can not do so, as I was actually fired, I accepted it. In response to my demand he promised me that the authority will pay me my November salary which he later refused to pay, [comma] which is unjust.

My reputation as a teacher was outstanding. All my students were satisfied with my method of teaching. Since joining the institute the students always showed good results in English on the board examination. I always proved to be a friendly and helpful colleague for my co-workers; they have no complaints against me. Although I was fed up I did my job honestly and sincerely while I was working there.

Keeping in mind my reputation and the situation I faced on December 3rd, I respectfully request that you release my November salary. Though in the circumstances surrounding my resignation the authority should not deem my security amount to be forfeit, I'm not asking for that amount.

I hope you will look into the situation carefully and will resolve the dispute equitably and with a minimum of delay.

Thanks in anticipation.

Yours truly,

AlpheccaStars(I don't know what you mean by "period". last year? last month?)

Here schools have 7 or 8 periods of 40 or 45 mins each. I don't know what you call it.

AlpheccaStars I asked for a day's leeway (deadline extension)

Yes, deadline extension.


'Session' means academic year, which usually starts from April 1st and ends in March 31 each year.

I could not find the appropriate words for 'authority', 'forfeit' and 'amount'. Would you please help me.

AlpheccaStarswhich is unjust.

Why is it incorrect? What should I say instead?

Thanks.

sundarnazHere schools have 7 or 8 periods of 40 or 45 mins each. I don't know what you call it.

That is the proper word, but it was out of context.

On December 3rd, 2018, just before the end of the school day, I asked for a one-day extension of the deadline for submitting the results from my English exam.
sundarnaz'Session' means academic year, which usually starts from April 1st and ends in March 31 each year.

We use "school year."

I was bound by my agreement and could not leave the job on my own until the end of the school year.
sundarnazI could not find the appropriate words for 'authority', 'forfeit' and 'amount'. Would you please help me.
Mr. Smith told me that the school administration / school officials would not return / refund my security deposit.
Since I resigned from my job, the administration can not [ withhold ] / [ refuse to reimburse me for] my security deposit. 
sundarnazWhy is it incorrect? What should I say instead?

On my demand, he promised that I would be paid my November salary. Later on, he reneged on this promise, which was unacceptable / unjust / unfair.

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Subject: Request for the grant of salary

Respected Sir,

On December 3rd, 2018 just before the end of the school day, I asked from Mr Smith for a one-day extension of the deadline for submitting the results from my English exam. Things went a little wrong and he, instead, asked for my resignation. I was bound by my agreement and could not leave the job on my own until the end of the school year but when he asked for my resignation I did so. I was fed up by the hard job conditions at your institute. I look upon Mr Smith's order as a redemption ( please give me an appropriate word ). Before leaving, Mr Smith told me that the school organisation would not refund my security deposit. Although, according to the rules and regulations, the school organisation can not do so, as I was actually fired, I accepted it. On my demand, he promised that I would be paid my November salary. Later on, he reneged on this promise, which was unjust.

My reputation as a teacher was outstanding. All my students were satisfied with my method of teaching. Since I joined the institute, the students always showed good results in English on the board examination. I always proved to be a friendly and helping colleagues; my co-workers have no complaints against me. Although I was fed up I did my job honestly and sincerely while I was working there. Keeping in view of my reputation and the condition I faced on December 3rd, please release my salary. Though in the circumstances I resigned from my job the school organisation can not withhold my security deposit I'm not asking for that.

I hope you will look into the situation carefully and will resolve the dispute sensibly, and will release my salary soon.

Thanks in anticipation.

Yours truly,

How is it now AS?

Here are some options - in order of my preference / usage:

I look upon Mr Smith's order as a (welcome) release from an intolerable situation.
I look upon Mr Smith's order as a relief – liberating me from an intolerable situation.
I look upon Mr Smith's order as a deliverance from an intolerable situation. (This is more formal.)

Thanks AS.
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sundarnazI asked from Mr Smith

The highlighted word is superfluous.

sundarnazI was fed up by the hard job conditions at your institute.

While this is possible, it's not natural. Using with instead of by, as well as working conditions or just conditions would be.

sundarnazBefore leaving, Mr Smith told me that the school organisation would not refund my security deposit.

The use of the highlighted word is very strange and unfamiliar from a British perspective. You would be better off leaving it out.

sundarnazI always proved to be a friendly and helping colleagues; my co-workers have no complaints against me.

The blue parts mean the same thing but, the first is used in British English. The second is used in American English. It's not natural or necessary to use a mix of both kinds of English. You should choose one and be consistent.


The yellow part is not good. You could write it as a friendly and helpful colleague. If you did not mean that, you could write friendly and helpful to colleagues.

sundarnazKeeping in view of my reputation and the condition I faced on December 3rd,

The first part is clumsy and wordy. You should replace it with the word considering.


You also need to write conditions.

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