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Hi everybody! I have to answer three open questions for my application (I'm applying for an internship in a financial institution). Here are the questions: can anyone check them? Thank you very much! P.S.: should you be interested in Italian or need some help with it, ask me!

1. Why are you interested in a career in the ******** division at *******?

I am interested in a career in the ********* division because I am fascinated by a job that allows me to get in touch with such a diverse range of clients, from individuals to families and foundations, to learn and absorbe from their success stories, and to apply my skills and creativity to discuss new investment ideas to achieve their goal, in a long term, personal relationship. I think that (NAME OF FINANCIAL INSTITUTION) is the right place to do that, because of its reputation of excellence across the industry and its client-focused culture. There I could be in contact with the other divisions of the firm, and have access to a wide range of asset classes to offer always the best products to the clients.

2. What skills would you like to develop in order to be successful in this role?

I think there is at least one skill a ********** adviser should develop to be succesfull: that is the capability to understand each client’s needs, as well as his objectives, preferences and constraints, even when the client is not able to express them. Clients are not usually finance professionals, so they can not say, for example, how much risk they can handle, what kind of exposure they want to the markets and, above all, what do they want to achieve through their investments. I would like to learn to answer clients even what they do not ask, and to make them understand what they are doing: I believe that only with complete awareness clients will be fully satisfied, and will trust the adviser even on a personal level.

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Overall very good, Sharleen. A few suggestions in bold:

1. Why are you interested in a career in the ******** division at *******?

I am interested in a career in the ********* division because I am fascinated by a job that allows me to get in touch with such a diverse range of clients, from individuals to families and foundations, to learn and absorb from their success stories, and to apply my skills and creativity in discussing new investment ideas to achieve their goal in a long-term personal relationship. I think that (NAME OF FINANCIAL INSTITUTION) is the right place to do that, because of its reputation for excellence across the industry and its client-focused culture. There I would be in contact with the other divisions of the firm and have access to a wide range of asset classes in order to offer the best products to our clients.

2. What skills would you like to develop in order to be successful in this role?

I think there is at least one skill a(n) ********** adviser should develop to be successful: the ability to understand each client’s needs, objectives, preferences and constraints, even when the client is unable to express these distinctly. Clients are not usually finance professionals, so they cannot indicate, for example, how much risk they can handle, what kind of exposure to the markets they want and, above all, what they want to achieve through their investments. I would like to learn to answer the clients' unasked questions, and to help them understand investment theory and process. I believe that by gaining a complete awareness of what they are doing, clients will be fully satisfied and trust the adviser even at the personal level.

3. Describe a non-academic personal achievement that has significantly impacted you. How has this shaped you into the person you are today?
I practiced karate for several years, and sometimes took part in exhibitions and tournaments. In 2001, when I held a 5th kyu (green belt), I participated in the qualifying round for the Italian Championship as part of the “Shotokan” team. We managed to qualify, but competition at the Italian Championship would be much stiffer, so we practiced hard for four months, with three training sessions a week and frequent tournaments on the weekends. We arrived with such enthusiasm and energy at the championship meet that we won-- and qualified for the European Championship at the end of that year! That experience made me understand that if you believe in your skills and commit yourself with passion, you can achieve results beyond your imagination.
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Thnk you very much Mr. Micawber for your help! Now I'll follow your advices, and hope!