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He grabs the harness of Bucephalas and turns it towards the sun. Hence, not allowing Bucephalas to view his shadow because Alexander had noticed when the horse saw his shadow it became frightened. Thus, trying to calm it down, so mounting it would be easier. When Bucephalas starts to gallop away, Alexander runs along side it, and pats the horse’s neck now and then. Then, suddenly the young prince jumps atop of the wild horse. The raging horse tries to shake him off but, Alexander holds on tight. Bucephalas tries harder to knock him off, but Alexander continues to hold on. Throughout the youthful prince whispers soothing words in the horse’s ear. Bucephalas enraged gallops into the open fields taking him and Alexander out of the publics view. By the time the public can see them again, it seems Alexander has finally tamed Bucephalas. Therefore, Alexander had been able to mount the wild horse without ever lashing it, but only trying to calm it with soothing words and attempting to become one with it. A technique only the prince thought of.

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When Anaxarhos, a physican says Alexander is greater than Heracles, Cleitos can’t take it any longer and reminds Alexander that he too is a man and not a god. Alexander tells him he has no right to talk back to a king. After this, Cleitos goes ballistic; he says everything that he’s been longing say. Alexander grabs a spear to throw at Cleitos. Hephaistion and Perdiccas go to stop him while Crateros and Ptolemy try to quiet down Cleitos. The two take Cleitos out of the room and Alexander sits down. Alexander starts to drink wine and then suddenly Cleitos comes back shouting and Alexander takes the spear and pierces it through Cleitos heart before anyone could stop him or before he could come back to his senses.

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DoomsdayHe grabs the harness of Bucephalus and turns it [either "him" or "his head"] towards the sun. Hence, not allowing Bucephalus to view his shadow because Alexander had noticed when the horse saw his shadow, it [he] became frightened. Thus, trying to calm it down, so mounting it would be easier. When Bucephalus starts to gallop away, Alexander runs along side it, and pats the horse’s neck now and then.[use "him", not "it" here - the horse has a gender] Then, suddenly the young prince jumps atop of the wild horse. The raging horse tries to shake him off but Alexander holds on tight. Bucephalus tries harder to knock him off, but Alexander continues to hold on. Throughout the youthful prince whispers soothing words in the horse’s ear. Bucephalus enraged gallops into the open fields taking him and Alexander out of the publics [people's] view. By the time the public [people] can see them again, it seems Alexander has finally tamed Bucephalus. Therefore, Alexander had been able to mount the wild horse without ever lashing it, but only trying to calm it with soothing words and attempting to become one with it. A technique only the prince thought of.

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When Anaxarhos, a physican, says Alexander is greater than Heracles, Cleitos can’t take it any longer and reminds Alexander that he too is a man and not a god. Alexander tells him he has no right to talk back to a king. After this, Cleitos goes ballistic [too colloquial - find another phrase]; he says everything that he’s been longing say. Alexander grabs a spear to throw at Cleitos. Hephaistion and Perdiccas go to stop him while Crateros and Ptolemy try to quiet down Cleitos. The two take Cleitos out of the room and Alexander sits down. Alexander starts to drink wine and then suddenly Cleitos comes back shouting and Alexander takes the spear and pierces it through Cleitos's heart before anyone can stop him or before he could come back to his senses.

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12. Why do Alexander’s men believe that he was killed?

When Alexander and his army are fighting the Mallians, Alexander sees all of his soldier dropping dead, so he goes forward to the enemy wall and charges to the top and exposes himself to thousands of enemies. The enemies take advantage of this and start attacking and one arrow pierces his breast. When his soldiers find him, he is on the floor in a puddle of a blood. Seeing him like this they think he has been killed. The news goes around and the soldiers are left shocked. After hearing the wailing, the king asks, “What is going on?” A soldier tells him that his other soldiers think he is dead. He asks some men to help him into a ship so they may know he is alive.
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