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He grabs the harness of Bucephalas and turns it towards the sun. Hence, not allowing Bucephalas to view his shadow because Alexander had noticed when the horse saw his shadow it became frightened. Thus, trying to calm it down, so mounting it would be easier. When Bucephalas starts to gallop away, Alexander runs along side it, and pats the horse’s neck now and then. Then, suddenly the young prince jumps atop of the wild horse. The raging horse tries to shake him off but, Alexander holds on tight. Bucephalas tries harder to knock him off, but Alexander continues to hold on. Throughout the youthful prince whispers soothing words in the horse’s ear. Bucephalas enraged gallops into the open fields taking him and Alexander out of the publics view. By the time the public can see them again, it seems Alexander has finally tamed Bucephalas. Therefore, Alexander had been able to mount the wild horse without ever lashing it, but only trying to calm it with soothing words and attempting to become one with it. A technique only the prince thought of.

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When Anaxarhos, a physican says Alexander is greater than Heracles, Cleitos can’t take it any longer and reminds Alexander that he too is a man and not a god. Alexander tells him he has no right to talk back to a king. After this, Cleitos goes ballistic; he says everything that he’s been longing say. Alexander grabs a spear to throw at Cleitos. Hephaistion and Perdiccas go to stop him while Crateros and Ptolemy try to quiet down Cleitos. The two take Cleitos out of the room and Alexander sits down. Alexander starts to drink wine and then suddenly Cleitos comes back shouting and Alexander takes the spear and pierces it through Cleitos heart before anyone could stop him or before he could come back to his senses.

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Hi,

I'm afraid I don't have time to help right now, as it's very late and I am on my way to bed.

However, I hope you won't mind my saying quickly that I prefer to answer posts that include 'please'.

Clive
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This is not the way to say 'please'.

You should say something like "Could you please ... " when you ask a question, and after your query has been answered, remember to say "Thanks'.

Most of the members are interested only in getting answers and, if they don't understand the first reply, they will ask again. And once they've got what they wanted, we hear no more from them until they ask another question.
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Hi,

I've suggested some edits. A named and famous horse like this is often referred to as 'he/him'.

He grabs the harness of Bucephalas and turns him towards the sun, hence not allowing Bucephalas to view his shadow because Alexander had noticed that, when the horse saw his own shadow, he became frightened. Thus, he is trying to calm the horse down, so that mounting will be easier. When Bucephalas starts to gallop away, Alexander runs alongside him, and pats the horse’s neck now and then. Then, suddenly, the young prince jumps atop of the wild horse. The raging horse tries to shake him off, but Alexander holds on tight. Bucephalas tries harder to throw him off, but Alexander continues to hold on. Throughout, the youthful prince whispers soothing words in the horse’s ear. Bucephalas, enraged, gallops into the open fields taking him and Alexander out of the public's view. By the time people can see them again, it seems Alexander has finally tamed Bucephalas. Thus, Alexander has been able to mount the wild horse without ever lashing him, but only trying to calm him with soothing words and by attempting to become one with him - a technique thought of only by the prince.

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When Anaxarhos, a physican, says that Alexander is greater than Heracles, Cleitos cannot take it any longer and reminds Alexander that he, too, is a man and not a god. Alexander tells him he has no right to talk back to a king. After this, Cleitos goes ballistic <<< this is very slangy, I suggest you say 'is enraged', and says everything that he’s been longing to say. Alexander grabs a spear to throw at Cleitos. Hephaistion and Perdiccas go to stop him while Crateros and Ptolemy try to calm Cleitos. The two take Cleitos out of the room and Alexander sits down. He starts to drink wine, and then suddenly Cleitos comes back shouting and Alexander takes the spear and pierces Cleitos through the heart before anyone can stop him or before he (Alexander or Cleitos?) can return to his senses.

Best wishes, Clive
thanks clive. your help is apperciated...
Hi,

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Clive
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