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Clouds, first illuminated in antiquity by Aristotle in his treatise Meteorologica, are microscopic assemblages of liquid water, ice crystals, and aerosols. Clouds exist throughout the homosphere—for example, stratosphere and troposphere— and are classified into five distinct types with respect to three étages, low, medium, and high altitudes, in accordance with Luke Howard’s Latinate nomenclature—for example, stratiform, cirriform, stratocumuliform, cumuliform, and cumulonimbiform.



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Clouds, first illuminated in antiquity by Aristotle in his treatise Meteorologica, are microscopic assemblages of liquid water, ice crystals, and aerosols. Clouds exist throughout the homosphere, which includes for example the stratosphere and troposphere, and are classified into five distinct types with respect to three étages, which are low, medium, and high altitudes. This is in accordance with Luke Howard’s Latinate nomenclature, for example stratiform, cirriform, stratocumuliform, cumuliform, and cumulonimbiform.