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It cannot be denied that technology has developed very strongly recently , this made personal devices become more popular and more essential . In my opinion , it plays a crucial role in our lives , i completely trust that this is a positive development .

Firstly , we should understand what is technology . This is a wide conception , it consist of modern devices , progess sciences , things that are addressed by artificial wisdom , ect .. Generally , technology is items which help our lives to become better , more simple and more interesting . And one of that items is potential to work without being on company , work places even if we can work from any where we want . With small laptop or smartphone , we may bring everywhere such as coffee , hotel , .. because wifi is currently widespread , especially as public places . 4G is a indisopensable part in our lives , it is portable whenever we go anywhere , it even have in there . Next to , some technologist are praticing 5G on many countries of Euroupe , and China .

Secondly , nowadays , jobs are solved at all by technology namely personal devices . It is too convenient to use , deal with jobs and problems . Moreover , technology have a cheap price than many years ago . I will demonstrate by some evidence , with an iphone and samsung smartphone price , more expensive than nows . In 2015 , one iphone cost approximately 2000 dollar but in 2021 , it is just about 1000 dollar , with the most morden technology .

In conclusion , technology has changed so much our lives , and but it is available on these

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Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?


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Your essay is filled with spacing errors.

You did not focus on the essay topic. This essay is not about technology. Humans have been developing new technologies for a hundred thousand years, when they first learned how to make stone tools and use fire for cooking.

The topic is "more people are working from home" and "students are taking online courses".

There are a lot of spelling and grammatical errors, too. Please write your essay again. You can follow this guideline.


It cannot be denied that technology has developed very strongly recently , (That makes no sense. Humans have been developing technology since the stone age, when they developed weapons and axes made of stone. ) this made personal devices become more popular and more essential . (spacing error o not put a space before a punctuation mark.) In my opinion , it (What do you mean by "it"? Be specific) plays a crucial role in our lives , i ("i" is a letter of the alphabet. "i" is not a person. ) completely trust that this is a positive development .

Firstly , First, we should understand what is technology . ( wrong word order. spacing error. Also, this is completely off-topic. You must focus on the topic of the essay, which is working from home..) This is a wide conception , it consist of modern devices , progess sciences , things that are addressed by artificial wisdom , ect .. Generally , technology is items which help our lives to become better , more simple and more interesting . And one of that items is potential to work without being on company , work places even if we can work from any where we want . With small laptop or smartphone , we may bring everywhere such as coffee , hotel , .. because wifi is currently widespread , especially as public places . 4G is a indisopensable part in our lives , it is portable whenever we go anywhere , it even have in there . Next to , some technologist are praticing 5G on many countries of Euroupe , and China .

Secondly , nowadays , jobs are solved at all by technology namely personal devices . It is too convenient to use , deal with jobs and problems . Moreover , technology have a cheap price than many years ago . I will demonstrate by some evidence , with an iphone and samsung smartphone price , more expensive than nows . In 2015 , one iphone cost approximately 2000 dollar but in 2021 , it is just about 1000 dollar , with the most morden technology .

In conclusion , technology has changed so much our lives , and but it is available on these