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It is true that due to the development of technology, both adults and children are allowed to work and study at home. In general, I firmly believe that this phenomenon bring the beneficial effects to humans' life.

To begin with, it is obvious to say that people working or studying at home are easily disturbed by several kinds of devices connecting the internet such as smart phones or smart TV. They tend to utilize those devices during the working time and it leads to the decrease in the productivity of work. Moreover, those devices can be the cheating tools of children when they take the exam. In fact, children tend to use the computer which used to do the test to search the answer on the internet. Their teachers cannot control that so their tests' result do not reflect exactly their academic level.
However, there are numerous advantages which working at home bring for people. First, people have more opportunity to work and study in reputable companies or universities. It is undeniable that going abroad cost exorbitant amount of money so studying at home may save the money. Despite working or studying online, they still accumulate the same knowledge and income like they do offline. Secondly, staying at home assists people to have the diseases because there is the lack of face-to-face interaction. According to recent survey, the most effective way to reduce the number of patients having the Covid-19 virus is that encourage people to work and study at home. The Covid-19 pandemic is spreading all over the world so the gorvenment in numerous countries decide to have isolation in their society.
To sum up, although doing the work at home still have problems, they may be tackled by the technology. For these reasons, I strongly think that the advantages of this trend overshadow the disadvantages.

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Also, you must qualify "technology" when you use that word. Humans have been developing and improving technology for hundreds of thousands of years!

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It is true that (Would you write something that is false? Delete this dummy-it clause. It adds nothing but a distraction to your essay.) Due to the development of computing and communications technology, (You do not mean stone tools or other ancient things, so tell the reader what kind of technology you are referring to.) both adults and children are able to are allowed to (This means they get permission. You do not mean that.) work and study at home. In general, I firmly believe that this is a positive development since it phenomenon (wrong usage. This is not the correct word to use.) bring (wrong form) many benefits to our lives. the beneficial effects to humans' life. (Do not use "human" as a noun unless you are comparting us with other animal species. Answer the essay prompt. "Is this a positive or negative development?)

(You have answered this exam entirely incorrectly. This is not an advantages/ disadvantages type of task. You answer "it is a positive development", but then give an argument that does NOT support your position. You have contradicted yourself, and this will result in a very bad "task response" score.)

To begin with, it is obvious to say (Avoid dummy-it clauses. ) that people working or studying at home are easily disturbed by several kinds of devices connecting (wrong form and expression) that are connected to the internet such as smart phones or smart TV. (How does this argument support your position that it is a positive development?) They tend to utilize (This is unnatural). When they should be working, they will pay attention to those devices during the working time (This is unnatural. Also, they are disturbed by other things at home such as someone knocking at the door. ). and it leads to the decrease in their productivity of work. Moreover, children can use those devices to cheat can be the cheating tools of children when they take the exam. In fact, children tend can use the computer on which they are taking a which used to do the test to search for the answer on the internet. Their teachers cannot control that so their tests' results do not reflect exactly their academic level.


However, there are numerous advantages which working at home bring for people. First, people have more opportunity to work and study in reputable companies or universities. It is undeniable that (Avoid dummy-it clauses. ) going abroad cost (wrong form) (Avoid dummy-it clauses. ) a student or their family an exorbitant amount of money so studying at home may saves the money. Despite working or studying online, they still accumulate the same knowledge and earn the same income like as they do in person. offline. Secondly, Second, staying at home assists people to have the diseases (Does staying at home makes them sick? Maybe mentally ill because they miss social interaction.) because there is the lack of face-to-face interaction. According to recent survey, (wrong form) the most effective way to reduce the number of patients having the Covid-19 virus is that to encourage people to work and study at home. The Covid-19 pandemic is spreading all over the world so the gorvenment in numerous countries decide to have isolation social distancing rules in their society.
To sum up, although doing their work at home still have problems, they may be tackled by the technology. (Like a football game when one player tackles the one with the ball? Does technology force you to fall down to the floor?) For these reasons, I strongly think that the advantages of this trend overshadow the disadvantages. (That is completely off-topic. You must not write an advantages/disadvantages essay for this task. It will be very bad for your score. You need to learn the five essay types. You have to answer each one according to the type.

In type 1. an opinion essay, you have to pick one position and defend it in the body paragraphs. Here is an outline:

Paragraph 1: State your opinion:

This is a positive development because people can avoid infectious diseases and save money.

Body Paragraph 1: Give the first argument and develop it with examples.
Body Paragraph 2: Give the second argument and develop it with examples.

Conclusion: Restate your position and summarize the points in the two body paragraphs.