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In today's modern society, both adults and children are working and studying at home due to the development of technology. Some people argued that this tendency is a demerit development, but i think it will brings some merit improvement for people. The reasons are justified further.
Firstly, working and studying from home take advantage of saving time. Recently, time organizing is crucial part of life. Online technology can meet the needs of employee and student. For example, they can have more time to spend time with their loved ones and do another things such as house work, part-time job,... Similarly, it is also cheap for them when working and studying at home, For example, student will not pay much on tuition fees when they study online. Because they dont go to school and use any facilities.
In addition, this trend also safe and convenient to use for peple. People who living in dangerous place no need to go out and easily do everything at home. They also study and work through internet everywhere they want namely in the coffee shop, at the beach, in the mountain or in another city. Moreover, virtual classes helps student understand any topics faster, which is beneficial for them in the future. To illustrate, due to the covid pandamic, many school in Vietnam, USA, China have opend online class to teach through many platfrom.
In conclusion, the modern technology play a important role for work of a busy worker. Also, with learning online option brings many benefit for student and from that parents can feel safe for their children.

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[ 1] In today's modern society, both adults and children are working and studying at home due to the development of technology. Advancements in modern telecommunication technology and the widespread access to the internet have enabled a lot of people to work or study from home. Some people [ 2] argued argue that this [ 3] tendency is a demerit is a negative development, but I think it [ 4] will brings some merit improvement advantages for people. The reasons are justified further. [ 5]

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Firstly, working and or studying from home take has the advantage of saving time. Recently, The fast pace of modern life means time organizing time is crucial for success. part of life. Online technology can meet the needs of employee and student. For example, they can study or do their work at any time suitable for them, so they can have more time to spend time with their loved ones and do [ 7] another other things such as house work, or sports. part-time job,... [ 8] Similarly, Moreover, it is also cheaper for them when working and studying at home, For example, [ 9] students or workers will save on transport costs not pay much on tuition fees when they study or work online. Because they dont go to school and use any facilities.

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[ 1]: That sentence implies that children work!

[ 2]: Note the correct tense.

[ 3]: That is unnatural.

[ 4]: After “will”, we use a base verb.

[ 5]: That’s a meaningless filler.

[ 6]: Use a blank line to separate your paragraphs.

[ 7]: “another” is used with a singular noun.

[ 8]: That is not a similar point.

[ 9]: When we talk about something in general, we use the plural (if it’s countable).

The rest of your essay is not well written. I suggest you write a paragraph about the disadvantages of working/studying from home.