Computer becomes more and more popular in education. Personally, I disagree with the idea that computer plays more important role than teacher in the classroom because I believe that the teacher can tackle many problems which computer is impossible to solve.
On the one hand, I agree that computer is necessary in order for people to hit a book better. Thanks to cyberspace, student can attend any courses conveniently. For example, Internet linked computer allows learners to study in a flexible way meaning that they can work wherever and whenever they want. Besides, computer offers open access for everyone who is willing to learn. For instance, my mother fall in love with French cuisine and she has been enrolling an online course with French master chef without a face- to- face class.
Nevertheless, I believe that teacher have indispensable responsibilities in class. Firstly, unlike an inanimate screen, flesh and blood person can be close with the student as friends who hit it off. They can give advice, feedback for each student's assignment, encourage when they are on the bad mood and congratulate on achievement. Secondly, teacher can understand each student's strong point and weak point so they can set suitable teaching methods. Last but not least, teacher plays role as bridge between the student and their family. Besides reflect the learner's study they can help parent keep control with their kids if students have bad behaviors in the classroom such as, play truant, mischievousness.
In conclusion, while computer more and more go viral, I do not agree people take teacher for granted.

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Topic: As computer are being used more and more in education there will soon be no role for the teacher in the classroom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

My essay:

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Computer becomes more and more popular in education. (That is incorrect English. Good English: Computers are becoming...) Personally, I disagree with the idea that (missing word) computer plays (missing word) more important role than (missing word) teacher in the classroom because I believe that the teacher can tackle many problems which computer is impossible to solve. (That is incorrect English. Good English: ...which computers cannot solve. / ...which are impossible to solve with a computer.)


On the one hand, I agree that computer is necessary (Incorrect English) in order for people to hit a book better. (Wrong usage.) Thanks to cyberspace, student (wrong form) can attend any courses conveniently. For example, (missing word) Internet linked computer allows learners to study in a flexible way (missing punctuation) meaning that they can work wherever and whenever they want. Besides, computer offers (Incorrect English) open access for everyone who is willing to learn. For instance, my mother fall (wrong form) in love with French cuisine and she has been enrolling (wrong form) (missing word) an online course with (missing word) French master chef without a face- to- face (spacing errors) class.


Nevertheless, I believe that teacher (wrong form) have indispensable responsibilities in class. First, unlike an inanimate screen, (missing word) flesh and blood (missing punctuation) person can be close with the student as friends who hit it off. (Too informal for an academic essay. Do not use casual language in formal essays.) They can give advice, (missing word) feedback for each student's assignment, encourage (missing word) when they are on (wrong word) the (wrong word) bad mood and congratulate (missing word) on (missing word) achievement. (wrong form) Second, (missing word) teacher can understand each student's strong point (wrong form) and weak point (wrong form) so they can set (wrong word) suitable teaching methods. Last but not least, (missing word) teacher plays (missing word) role as bridge between the student and their family. Besides reflect (wrong form) (missing word) the learner's study (missing punctuation) they can help (missing word) parent (wrong form) keep control with (wrong word) their kids if (missing word) students have bad behaviors in the classroom such as, play (wrong form) truant, (missing word) mischievousness.


Corrected version:

Nevertheless, I believe that teachers have indispensable responsibilities in class. First, unlike an inanimate screen, a flesh-and-blood person can be close with the student like a friend. They can give advice and feedback for each student's assignment, encourage them when they are in a bad mood and congratulate them on their achievements. Second, a teacher can understand each student's strong points and weak points so they can use suitable teaching methods. Last but not least, a teacher plays a role as bridge between the student and their family. Besides reflecting on the learner's study, they can help the parents keep control of their kids if they have bad behaviors in the classroom such as playing truant or being mischievous.



In conclusion, while computer more and more go viral, (Too informal) I do not agree (missing word) people take teacher for granted.

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Technology is being used increasingly in the classroom and some people believe that educators will become redundant. I somewhat disagree that teachers will be replaced by machines.

The main reason why I think that teachers are essential is because they encourage and discipline students. Many people find it difficult to be interested in learning new things. Therefore educators are needed to make classes more interesting and stimulate students’ desires for learning. Also, in the case of young people, teachers often need to force students to learn through the use of punishments.

Another reason why teachers are needed is because they can teach young people important skills and values. This is because educators serve as role models to their students and teach them how to appropriately interact with their peers. Therefore, if people only learn using machines they will lose the opportunity to learn important social skills and values.

However, studying over the internet certainly offers a lot of convenience. First, we are able to study in the comfort of our own homes, without the need to commute to school. Second, we can choose to study at any time we like even in the middle of the night.

In conclusion, I somewhat disagree that machines can replace teachers. This is because teachers can encourage students to learn and teach them how to interact with other people. However, computers do offer the ability for people to learn anywhere at any time.

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