Shall I say:
1. It was highlighted that all defective milk have been excluded in the order, on the request of the client.
2. It was highlighted that as per client's request,all defective milk have been excluded in the order
Which one sounds better?
1. It was highlighted that all defective milk have been excluded in the order, on the request of the client.
2. It was highlighted that as per client's request,all defective milk have been excluded in the order
Which one sounds better?
1 2
Comments
No. 1 sounds much, much better to me.
The use of 'per client's request' in No. 2 is typical of poor business writing by someone who thinks this kind of jargon makes the sentence seem more 'important and educated' and yet who has no feel for style or clarity of language.
Wow, did I really write such a strongly worded opinion?
A couple of additional corrections are a also needed:
It was highlighted that all defective milk HAD or HAS been excluded FROM the order, on the request of the client.
Best wishes,
Clive
2. It was highlighted, as per the client's request, that all defective milk has been excluded in the order.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
M-W online:
Main Entry: per
Function: preposition
1 : by the means or agency of : THROUGH
2 : with respect to every member of a specified group : for each
3 : according to -- often used with as
usage Per occurs most frequently in business contexts; its use outside such contexts is often criticized but is quite widespread, especially in sense 2. Its most common and natural nonbusiness uses always involve figures, usually in relation to price <$150 per performance>, automobiles , or sports .
'At the client's request' is also very common. 'As per' sounds a little old-fashioned these days.
MrP
Googled:
5,540,000 English pages for "as per".
People use it because it is one collocation that is available to ENLs to use in certain circumstances.
paco
Googled: Results 1 - 10 of about 823,000 for "as per".
For the full phrase, I got,
Results 1 - 3 of about 7 for "as per the client's request".
The original question was 'Which one sounds better?'.
Do you think that a simple counting of google hits will adequately answer this question?
Best wishes,
Clive
I suppose you could use it if you wanted to deter prospective clients.
MrP