Please correct my dialogue to make it more natural..

tourist : Good morning I would like to ask about the entrance fees for an adult.How much is the entrance fee for children aged 5, 13 and 16 years ?

Cashier : Good morning, sir. Tickets for an adult is 12 dollars and for children aged between 13 to 16 years is 7dollars. Children who are 5 years old only need to pay 4 dollars

Tourist : Can you tell me the attractions that can be found here? I would also like to know the visiting hours too.

Cashier:: We have a lot of fun activities to join.First we have the water sculpture in the lobby. Then you can enjoy yourself in the dark ride in. You can also see the exhibitions about the energy station and the diorama. After all this you are welcome to buy a souvenir from our shop as a sweet reminder of your trip. We operate from 9.30am to 6.30pm on Saturdays , Sundays and public holidays. On Tuesadys, wednesdays and Thursdays the tim is from 9.30am to 5.30pm. The last admission for these days is one and a half hours before closing time. I hope you are satisfied with the information.

Tourist : Thank you very much. You have been very helpful.

Thanking for your help.
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I agree. Also learners should write based on what native English speakers would say in their culture and that's difficult to learn. Emotion: sad

Thanks for the dialog, CJ. I really enjoyed reading and comparing them.