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Wow, this website is popular. I have posted a question in this forum yesterday and now I couldn't find it. It must have been relegated elsewhere. Phew...

Anyway, as usual I need someone out there who is kind enough to proof-read my short thesis statement. I've taken hours to compose it but at times, we get caried out and make some silly grammar mistakes which can be very embarrasing. Appreciate your help. Here it goes:

"Kisho Kurokawa (b.1934) was born in Aichi Prefecture, Japan. He is known not only for his architecture but also for his thought and writings. An advocate of the philosophy of Symbiosis, Kisho Kurokawa is the architect of one of the world’s most well designed airports – Kuala Lumpur International Airport. The architecture of the airport is an abstract-symbolic of a symbiotic relationship between nature (Forest) and architecture (Airport)."

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Looks pretty good to me, NoGood. Here it is with some minor changes:

Kisho Kurokawa was born in 1934 in Aichi Prefecture, Japan. He is known not only for his architectural designs but also for his thought and writings. An advocate of the philosophy of symbiosis, Kisho Kurokawa is the architect of one of the world’s best-designed airports – Kuala Lumpur International Airport. The design of the airport is an abstract symbol of the symbiotic relationship between nature (forest) and architecture (airport).
Hi MM,

Thank you for your reply. It took me awhile to find my posting. :-). By the way, I have a question here, which one is correct; well-known or well known? Though I have seen some authors used the latter. Please enlighten me.

Lastly, could you help me to comment on the following passage:

Lord Norman Foster (b.1935), an internationally renown UK architect, has designed many high profile mega-projects throughout the world. Among them is the Hong Kong and Shanghai Bank which remains as one of the most expensive and technologically advanced buildings ever built in the 20th century. Also known among the locals as the “coat hangers” building because of the large exterior bracings that look like giant coat hangers.

Appreciate your comment.

Thank you.
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Hello, NoGood.

Well-known is used in the attributive position (before the noun)-- the well-known writer, Yukio Mishima-- while well known is used predicatively-- Mishima is also well known as a political activist.

What kind of comment would you like on the Lord Foster passage? I find it interesting. Hyphenate high-profile, comma after Bank, hyphenate technologically-advanced, The last sentence is only a sentence fragment.
Hi I'm back. It has been a very tiring and busy week. I have just completed these two short passages. I would appreciate if you could proofread them. Thank you.

Passage 1:

The Sydney Opera, one of the most iconic buildings of the 20th century is an image of great beauty known throughout the world. Its construction began in 1957 and was only opened to public 16 years later. While the building is internationally acclaimed, it was embroiled in controversy, which included the resignation of the Danish architect, Jørn Utzon (b.1918). He left Australia a broken man vowing never to return to the country that had compromised his dream.

Passage 2:

Designed by the internationally acclaimed UK architect, Lord Norman Foster (b.1935),
the Hong Kong International Airport or better known as Chek Lap Kok is one of the world’s busiest and largest airports ever built on [ a ] reclaimed land. Completed in 1998 at a cost of US 20 billion dollar and [with] a workfroce of 20,000 workers, its terminal
building boasts to have the largest covered retail space in the world.
Passage 1:

The Sydney Opera, one of the most iconic buildings of the 20th century, is an image of great beauty known throughout the world. Its construction began in 1957 and it was only opened to the public 16 years later. While the building is internationally acclaimed, it was embroiled in controversy, including the resignation of its Danish architect, Jørn Utzon (b.1918). He left Australia an embittered man, vowing never to return to the country that had compromised his dream. [I suggest 'embittered'; I don't know his biography, but I presume that he was angry and frustrated, not psychologically destroyed-- he went on to design many other meritorious projects.)

Passage 2:

Designed by the internationally acclaimed UK architect, Lord Norman Foster (b.1935), the Hong Kong International Airport (better known as Chek Lap Kok) is the world’s busiest and largest airport ever built on reclaimed land ['land' is uncountable here]. Completed in 1998 at a cost of US 20 billion dollars and with a workforce of 20,000, its terminal building boasts the largest covered retail space in the world.
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Interesting. When I studied city planning as an under-graduate student in the University of Tokyo, Japan, Mr Kisho Kurokawa taught us as a lecturer. I admired him then. But later I was so disappointed with him when I had to put into English what he wrote in Japanese. At that time I was a graduate student and I got some money by translating documents in European languages into Japanese and those in Japanese into English. One Friday night I was asked to translate an article Mr Kurokawa wrote for an architectural journal until Monday morning next week. The article was only of a size of about 10,000 words in English but what annoyed me was Kurokawa's poor writing skill of Japanese. What he wrote in Japanese was almost gibberish to me. So when I came across a Japanese sentence he wrote and I could not understand, I made by myself a new Japanese sentence that seemed similar to what Mr Kurokawa said and I put it into English. In this way I finished the work in the early morning Monday next week when Mr Kurokawa took a flight to Paris for some conference where he presented the oral paper that I translated (wrote?). This event was crucial to my life because since then I couldn’t help despising any people of so called 'famous' architects and I changed my major from city planning to environmental engineering.
paco
Hello MM,

Greetings from me. Hope you are well. As usual, I am posting this short passage for you to have a look. Appreciate your help.

Passage:

The Guggenheim Museum in Bilbao, designed by the American architect, Frank Gehry (b.1929) is an architectural landmark of distinctive character, and home to a host of modern and contemporary arts. Wrapped in titanium claddings, this innovative building has become a popular tourist attraction, drawing millions of visitors since its inception in 1997 – generating hundreds of million of dollars in revenue for this once-dying industrial city, a phenomenon, which critics have termed it the “Bilbao effect”.

Regards,

EnglishNoGood

PS - Paco: Thanks for sharing your story with us. I hope he won't be reading it.
The Guggenheim Museum in Bilbao, designed by the American architect, Frank Gehry (b.1929), is an architectural landmark of distinctive character and home to a host of modern and contemporary works of art . Wrapped in titanium cladding(s) [I would not expect cladding to be countable, but perhaps it is in architectural parlance-- would you check that, please?], this innovative building has become a popular tourist attraction, drawing millions of visitors since its inception in 1997 and generating hundreds of million of dollars in revenue for this once-dying industrial city, a phenomenon which critics have termed the “Bilbao effect”.

I am not an art critic-- is there a difference between modern and contemporary art? If there is no significance, one of them should be omitted.

Notice small punctuation changes. M-dashes should generally be avoided in serious writing.

MM
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