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A Journey called LIFE

By: Avetrhea

“Always put your best foot forward and accomplish things at your best. Live life as if it would be the last for you shall not pass this way again”

Life is the most challenging game that a man can play. It is risky but interesting to explore with. It is full of trials, ups and downs, and also a combination of struggles and victories. Some considers it as a long journey while others find it short.

If somebody asked you, “Are you ready to die young?” Of course, you’ll answer “No, I am not ready to die young?”

What if God take your life at your young age? Can you say that you already played your role in accomplishing your mission in the short span of time given to you? Are you happy in your achievements and accomplishments which were done to help your fellow creature? Are you satisfied with the things you’ve done before?

If not, then it’s time to continue your journey. And now, mark a new beginning. A start which eyes for improvement that will serve as a key to unlock big doors of opportunities. Let us always remember that there is sunshine after a rain. A brighter day will shine after we initiate the change that we ask for. We might experience the most turbulent period of our life but still the pain that we endure will be eased by the love that we receive.

If you hate someone, try to forgive. Anger is one of the most poisonous content in a man’s life. We don’t know that holding anger eats us from within. Some thinks that hating is a weapon against our enemies but the hatred that we throw bounces back and the harm that we do, we do it to ourselves.

Children are crying while others are dying. Some of them are seeking for love and affection that their family can’t give them. Children who live in orphanage are coping up with the problems that ruin their lives. Unfortunately, their parents haven’t claimed their responsibilities as the molder of their future. At the early stage of their life, they were victims of irregularities and wrecked family.

You are very lucky that you are still with your loving family. You still have people who care for your safety and care for your existence. They are blessings that we shall treasure in our lives. Love them whole heartedly and show how much you care.

Be a helping hand for those who need it most. I know you know how it feels being worthless, not accepted by other people and find it hard to emancipate in the fierce trials that strike your life. So take this opportunity to help. A small thing that we offer might take a big impact on their lives. When we were still child, we were taught by our teacher for what is the difference of right and wrong. Then the time had come that we need to apply the things we knew that is right and will benefit others. A move that will ricochet the pride that they lost and seize the chance to continue the fight that they started.

Be a shoulder to those who need somebody to be leaned on. Show that you support them especially at the times that they are at the weakening stage and covered by the darkness of life. Try to become a man who is accountable with someone he loves.

Every one of us is blessed with different skills and assets which can be used for the development of you and might other’s life too. Unfortunately, some were just afraid to explore and share it. They just let it to be unheard and unrecognized. Always remember that one’s strength is useless overtime it is unshared.

Take the opportunity to evolve yourself into a productive person who seeks for the development and one who takes the lead and serve unselfishly, without asking for any return. Quench these bad vibes that you possess now and turn it into an eloquent characteristic that will inspire others.
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I have marked a few places that need attention. Be consistent in using first person (I, we, our), second person (you, your) and third person (they, them).

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A Journey called LIFE
By: Avetrhea

“Always put your best foot forward and accomplish things at your best. Live life as if it would be the last for you shall not pass this way again”

Life is the most challenging game that a man can play. It is risky but interesting to explore with. It is full of trials, ups and downs, and also a combination of struggles and victories. Some considers it as a long journey while others find it short.
If somebody asked you, “Are you ready to die young?” Of course, you’ll answer “No, I am not ready to die young?”
What if God take your life at your young age? Can you say that you already played your role in accomplishing your mission in the short span of time given to you? Are you happy in your achievements and accomplishments which were done to help your fellow creature? Are you satisfied with the things you’ve done before?
If not, then it’s time to continue your journey. And now, mark a new beginning. A start which eyes for improvement that will serve as a key to unlock big doors of opportunities (incomplete sentence, fragment). Let us always remember that there is sunshine after a rain. A brighter day will shine after we initiate the change that we ask for. We might experience the most turbulent period of our life but still the pain that we endure will be eased by the love that we receive.
If you hate someone, try to forgive. Anger is one of the most poisonous content things in a man’s life. We don’t know that holding anger eats us from within. Some thinks that hating is a weapon against our enemies but the hatred that we throw bounces back and the harm that we do, we do it to ourselves.
Children are crying while others are dying. Some of them are seeking for love and affection that their family can’t give them. Children who live in orphanage are coping up with the problems that ruin their lives. Unfortunately, their parents haven’t claimed their responsibilities as the molder of their future. At the early stage of their life, they were victims of irregularities (?) and wrecked family.
You are very lucky that you are still with your loving family. You still have people who care for your safety and care for your existence. They are blessings that we shall treasure in our lives. Love them whole heartedly (one word) and show how much you care.
Be a helping hand for those who need it most. I know you know how it feels being worthless, not accepted by other people and find it hard to emancipate (?) in the fierce trials that strike your life. So take this opportunity to help. A small thing that we offer might take a big impact on their lives. When we were still child, we were taught by our teacher for what is the difference of right and wrong. Then the time had come that we need to apply the things we knew that is right and will benefit others. A move that will ricochet the pride that they (?) lost and seize the chance to continue the fight that they started (incomplete sentence, fragment).
Be a shoulder to those who need somebody to be leaned on. Show that you support them especially at the times that they are at the weakening stage and covered by the darkness of life. Try to become a man who is accountable with someone he loves.
Every one of us is blessed with different skills and assets which can be used for the development of you and might (?) other’s life too. Unfortunately, some were just afraid to explore and share it. They just let it to be unheard and unrecognized. Always remember that one’s strength is useless overtime it is unshared.
Take the opportunity to evolve yourself into a productive person who seeks for the development and one who takes the lead and serve unselfishly, without asking for any return. Quench these bad vibes that you possess now and turn it into an eloquent characteristic that will inspire others.

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