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Betty, an old lady, arrived in Delhi from Washington last night. She ranged me this morning at my residence number.

Betty: This is Betty. Can I speak to Abil?
Abil: Hey, Betty! This is Abil speaking.
Betty: How are you Abil?
Abil: I am fine. Are you okay? Was there any trouble on the journey?
Betty: It was a nice journey and I enjoyed it very much.
Abil: Have you checked in a hotel or put up with Anita?
Betty: No. I am with my diplomat friend whom you know. Abil, can we meet up somewhere?
Abil: Sure, why not? Is it okay if I come over there? Or, Shall we meet up somewhere else?
Betty: Either is okay with me.
Abil: All right. Then wait for me. I will be there in 15 minutes.

Are there any mistakes? Can it be improved to make it sound more colloquial?
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Betty, an elderly lady, arrived in Delhi from Washington last night. She rang me this morning at home.

Betty: This is Betty Jones. Can I speak to Abil?
Abil: Hey, Betty! This is Abil speaking.
Betty: How are you, Abil?
Abil: I'm fine. And you? Did you have any trouble on your flight?
Betty: No, it was fine. I enjoyed it very much.
Abil: Have you checked into a hotel or are you staying with Anita?
Betty: Neither. I'm staying with my diplomat friend you know. Can we meet up somewhere?
Abil: Sure! Is it okay if I come over there? Or shall we meet somewhere else?
Betty: Either is okay with me.
Abil: All right. Then wait for me. I'll be there in 15 minutes.
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Thanks MM