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Write about the following topic.

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular.

Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

In the modern world today, shopping online is becoming more and more popular. People use it to buy many things such as books, clothes, shoes, tickets and even groceries. Besides many advantages of shopping in this way, it also has many disadvantages.

First of all, the advantage of buying things on the Internet is convenience. Whenever and wherever we are, in the city or in the countryside, wejust need a smartphone or a laptop and we can buy all the things we want. Therefore, we don’t need to go out and the products will be sent to our place. We also can order a product for someone. It will save a lot of times and money. Moreover, we can search a product in many websites to find a suitable price. Finally, the evaluation of products on the Internet is posted by the official companies so it is very accurate and comfortable.

On the other hand, shopping on the Internet also has many bad things. Firstly, when we buy things online, we have to spend much times in front of smartphone’s screen, which is bad for our eyes. We will also have no interaction with the world outside, which decreases our communication skills and isolates us from society. One more thing is the quality of the product. Besides many reliable websites on the Internet, there are also many fake websites. We can buy these fake or spoiled goods from these webs. And last but not least, the online shoppings also has danger with the financial security. Some websites don’t ensure about it or you have to pay the money before the good is delivered, which is unsafe.

In conclusion, shopping online has both advantages and disadvantages. Depending on what kind of products you buy, you can look for the most sensible way of buying it.

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Topic: Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the modern world today, shopping online is becoming more and more popular. People use it to buy many things such as books, clothes, shoes, tickets and even groceries. Besides many advantages of shopping in this way, it also has many disadvantages.


You did not answer the essay prompt in your first paragraph. The question is: Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

The examiner expects you to answer this with Yes or No as a thesis statement.


First of all, the advantage of buying things on the Internet is convenience. Whenever and wherever we are, in the city or in the countryside, wejust need a smartphone or a laptop and we can buy all the things we want. Therefore, we don’t need to go out and the products will be sent to our place. (Not logical. This is logical: We don't need to go out and bring our purchases back to our house.) We also can order a product for someone. It will save a lot of times and money. Moreover, we can search a product (wrong expression. I searched my house for the missing keys, but I had left them in the car. ) in many websites to find a suitable price. Finally, the evaluation of products on the Internet is posted by the official companies so it is very accurate and comfortable. (wrong word. My bed is comfortable.)

On the other hand, shopping on the Internet also has many bad things. Firstly, First, when we buy things online, we have to spend much times (wrong expression) in front of smartphone’s screen, which is bad for our eyes. We will also have no interaction with the world outside, which decreases our communication skills and isolates us from society. One more thing is the quality of the product. Besides many reliable websites on the Internet, there are also many fake websites. (The website is not fake; it is real.) We can buy these fake or spoiled goods from these webs. (wrong word) And last but not least, the online shoppings (wrong form) also has danger with the financial security. (wrong expression) Some websites don’t ensure about it (wrong expression) or you have to pay the money before the good (wrong word) is delivered, which is unsafe. (Will it explode and cause injury?)

In conclusion, shopping online has both advantages and disadvantages. Depending on what kind of products you buy, you can look for the most sensible way of buying it. (You still did not answer the essay question. That will lower your score for "task completion.")

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As technologies keep on evolving every day, the Internet has affected people's lives in many ways. One of the most popular ways of using the Internet is online shopping. Just like any other field, it has both advantages and disadvantages. Many people have to work in order to pay rent, taxes, food, etc., and as they spend more time at work, they can't manage to go shopping. That's why online shopping is very convenient. Although, its (typo edited by moderator) main drawback is that the customers can't try out the goods they're going to order and sometimes those arrive with some defects.

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rachelhumphreysAs technologies keep on evolving every day, the Internet has affected people's lives in many ways.

As technologies keep on evolving every day, The Internet has affected people's lives in many ways. One of the most popular ways of using the Internet is online shopping. Just like anything, other field, it has both advantages and disadvantages. Many people have to work in order to pay rent, taxes, food, and other living expenses etc., and as they spend more time at work, they can't manage the time to go to the shopping mall. That's why online shopping is very convenient. Although, However, there are drawbacks and the main ones are its main drawback is that the customers can't try out the goods they're going to order and sometimes the order arrives with some defective items. defects.

Subject: Please review my IELTS essay

Message body: Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Topic: Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

My essay:

The use of internet for marketing of different goods is becoming known by the populace and buying of items such as books, air tickets and groceries on the internet is increasing daily. This essay will discuss why the merits outweigh the demerits.

Purchasing of items on the internet has become convenient. Individuals do not have to go to the stores to get items that they need. They just require a smart phone to check different items needed and make an order when a choice is made. For instance, my younger sister told me to get her a specific book, which she would love to read. All I had to do was to browse through my phone for stores that have the book and I made an order. The book was delivered to me in less than 24 hours which saved me the stress of going from one place to another. This has made the process a stress free and enabling people in partaking in it.

Furthermore, the cost of items or goods to be purchased is known and it helps in budgeting. When cost of goods are known, individuals can choose items that can be affordable and can also vary different items with their price range. For example, I bought an android phone on Jumia when I saw that the price of the iPhone was far beyond my budget. This has enabled individuals to be financially ready when purchasing items.

However, individuals cannot see, feel or touch items needed before purchase, sometimes, the sizes are different from what is displayed. They purchase items based on what they see and believe it will be good qualities. For example, the hand bag I bought online was very small compared to a bigger size displayed on the internet when it was delivered to me. Also, some fraudsters post items on internet with stores that do not exist. Individuals fall victims and make payment for preferred items with the hope of it being delivered after providing address of contact. For example, a close friend was convinced to make payment for an item she chose online, however, after payment, she was blocked from having access to the site. In conclusion, the benefits of buying goods on line is more than the disadvantage

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