Hello teachers of EnglishForward, I've been so impulsive to sign up for CAE in June.

I went to the British Institute in my town to test my level, and they said I could try with CAE: but they didn't test my writing!!!

I've never written anything in English really, so you can immagine how bad my writing is.

I'm trying to write something every week, I'll be really gratefull if somebody could correct me.

You already did it one week ago: thanks a lot.

I'm practising on some CAE pastpapers. I hope it's fine if I don't write the tasks, but they are very long.

Thank you in any case (can I say this?).

Chiara

Dear Editor of News,

my name is Maria Rossini, I hope you can help me.

I’ve just come back from a beautiful trip to Asia, Australia and .

There is no doubt you live in a beautiful country!

I enjoyed my trip very much, but unfortunately nothing is perfect, and when arrived in ’s bus station,

my backpack got lost or was stolen. I reported this to the police, but nothing could be done.

I can’t describe my surprise yesterday when the door's bell rang and the postman gave me

my backpack straight in my hands! Someone sent it to me from , leaving

an unsigned note saying that he/she found it under a bush near ’s beach.

That’s why I’m writing here.

Firstly I would like to thank this person and express him/her my gratitude

for what he/she did. I hope he/she contacts me to thank him/her personally and to give

him/her back the money of the sending expenses, which must not have been law!

Also, while the backpack has been found, my passport is still missing. It could be near

’s beach, I don’t know. But wherever it is, if somebody finds it, he/she can write to

me at the address below or contact ’s police.

Thank you for the opportunity you gave to write in your newspaper.

Yours sincerely,

Maria Rossini

To Auckland Police Department,

my name is Maria Rossini,

on 14.04.’99 I reported to you that my backpack was lost.

Its reference number is MG/JE/148.

I write to inform you that the backpack has been found, but my passport,

O-H-65839, is still missing.

Please contact me if you find it. I’ll pay for the sending expenses.

Yours sincerely,

Maria Rossin
door's bell
-->doorbell

he/she
-->he

him/her
-->him.

Just stick with "he" and "him". Writing he/she, him/her all time can make something almost completely unreadable. Put an asterix and explain that you don't know the gender of the person.

me at the address below or contact Auckland’s police.
police --> police department

my name is Maria Rossini
my-->My

postman
-->mailman. Or maybe they call them postmen there?

I’ve just come back
-->I just came back. Although that could be correct as well.
beautiful trip
-->wonderful trip. Because you use the word "beautiful" twice, so this adds variety.
my backpack straight in my hands!
-->handed me my backpack.

Someone sent it to me from Auckland
-->Someone had sent it...

which must not have been law!
Rephrase this.

Thank you for the opportunity you gave to write in your newspaper.
A little awkward: try rephrasing.

Yours sincerely,
-->Sincerely, or Sincerely Yours, or Humbly,

14.04.’99
-->14 April 1999 or 1999-04-14

O-H-65839,
->(#O-H-65839)
Hello Marvin, thank you so much for your usefull help. I undersrtand your corrections.

"Postman": it's the word I knew (maybe British English?), I checked in the vocabulary and it's ok.

I tried to rephrase the sentences you said:

1) ...to give him back the money of the sending expenses, which must not have been cheap!

Or "must have been expensive" (but it's similar to the word "expenses").



2) Thank you for letting me write in your newspaper.

Can I say that?

Thank you,

Chiara