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Task 2:

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


In this modern world, with the development of technology, the need for precise data has been becoming indispensable. Information, in general, is shared rapidly and uncontrollably, despite the governments’ huge efforts to restrain. While I tend towards the viewpoint that it is better for people to share the data openly in terms of scientific researches, businesses and academic articles, I would have to support the high prevention for the security of enormously important expertises.

On the one hand, it is true/undoubted/undisputed/obvious that people need information as useful knowledge to enrich their understanding about the world around them and therefore enhance their lives quality through updating news including science, economy, academia, and so on. To be more specific, there are thousands of ways to gain up-to-date background such as digital course books, videos on platforms and posted articles in many groups on social media. Furthermore, people after learning about some aspects of their life can immediately apply it in practice to tackle unsolved problems. For instance, people whose forte is not economy probably can learn to become semi-professional investors and make money through online courses available on the internet.

On the other hand, sharing too much information without censoring can lead to serious threats to not only the citizens but also the authorities of those countries. Data about crucial parts of a nation such as politics, military and even medical needs to be protected comprehensively so that the opponents cannot take advantage of those in order to terrorise or manipulate the residents. In fact, the Vietnamese government will probably keep secrets about the number of deaths in battlegrounds in order to alleviate the fear of war for their warriors as well as generate bravery before the next fight. Personally, I agree with the decision of keeping the goverments’ prohibitively private information, which might be a useful tactic in citizens management and diplomatic control.

In conclusion, it seems to me that making information accessible plays a significant role in the general development of society and keeping some of that private is a feasible strategy for the government to supervise their nation.

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You wrote over 350 words. The minimum is 250. You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high band scores. And there are many reasons for this.

First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for each of those errors.

Second, your writing may be repetitious and wordy. This will cost you points in task response or coherence and cohesion.

Third, you will likely stray off-topic, and examiners will deduct points if you are not focused on the topic. Do not write about things that are not specifically given in the task. You will also be tempted to use weak or unsound arguments or even lose your direction and contradict yourself. Develop just two or three argument points with examples and personal experiences. It is much better to have two well-developed and fleshed-out argument points than to have four which are just individual separate statements.

Fourth, you will spend a lot of time writing, and not have sufficient time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the silly mistakes, which everyone makes, and that lowers your score.

Fifth, you will not have enough time for Task 1, and get a lower score there. You should allow 40 minutes for task and 20 minutes for Task 1. The word counts are designed so that you have ample time for brainstorming and then writing the two parts.

Aim to write 270-290 words for Task 2. Practice writing a lot of essays so you get a feeling for the length.

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In this modern world, with the development of technology, (delete. Technology has been being developed for a million years. Be very careful of the word "technology". It does not mean electronic gadgets, the internet, and smartphones.) the need for having access to precise data is has been becoming indispensable. (The "need" is not indispensable; you meant to write that data, or access to it, is indispensable. Besides, that is not particularly relevant to this task.) Information, in general, is shared rapidly and uncontrollably, despite the governments’ huge ("Huge" and 'big" are words for baby books. Avoid them in academic writing.) efforts to restrain it. While I tend towards the viewpoint that it is better for people to share the data (Do you know that there is a very significance difference between data and information? Do not use these words interchangeably. ) openly in terms of scientific researches, (wrong form - research is non-count) businesses and academic articles, I would have to support the high prevention (So do you want to prevent information security? That is, all security systems must be turned off.) for the security of enormously important expertises. (invalid word.)


On the one hand, it is true/undoubted/undisputed/obvious that (Do not use any of these. Just delete. The dummy-it construction is generally distasteful. It ruins an otherwise powerful sentence.) people need information as useful knowledge to since it enriches their understanding about the world around them. 9Just stop your sentence here. The rest is quite bad) and therefore enhance their lives quality (poor English) through updating news (That makes no sense.) including science, economy, academia, and so on. (Do not use ellipses, "etc." or phrases like "and so on" in academic writing. It shows incomplete thinking.) To be more specific, there are thousands of ways to gain up-to-date background (wrong word) such as digital course books, (Do you mean e-books?) videos on platforms (I do not know what this means - Do you mean online video publishing sites such as YouTube?) and posted articles posted in many groups on social media. Furthermore, people after learning about some aspects of their life (That makes no sense. Can you be more specific? ) can immediately apply it in practice to tackle unsolved problems. For instance, people whose forte is not economy probably can learn to become semi-professional investors (That is not an unsolved problem. Give relevant examples. ) and make money after completing an on-line course in stock market investing through online courses available on the internet.

On the other hand, sharing too much information without a security review censoring can lead to serious threats to not only the citizens but also the authorities of those (Which ones? there is not antecedent to reference.) countries. Certain data in areas about crucial parts of a nation such as politics, advanced military weapons systems and even medical research needs to be protected comprehensively so that the opponents cannot take advantage of it those in order to terrorise or manipulate the residents. In fact, the Vietnamese government will probably keep secrets about the number of deaths in the wars fought fifty to eighty years ago battlegrounds in order to alleviate the fear of war for their warriors soldiers as well as generate bravery before the next fight. Personally, I agree with the decision of keeping (Write your opinion in the opening paragraph only. It does not belong in a body paragraph. The body paragraphs contain arguments supporting your position.) The govermentsprohibitively (wrong word) private information needs to be secured because it which might be a useful tactic in citizens management and diplomatic control. (You are saying that the government has to conceal the truth so that the lies that they use in their propaganda to keep the citizens under control cannot be challenged.)

In conclusion, it seems to me that making information accessible plays a significant role in the general development of society and keeping some of that private is a feasible strategy for the government to supervise control their nation.


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