The two diagrams give information about the outcome of adult educations. The first figure illustrates the motive why adults want to continue their study and the other one presents how the course fees should by funded.


According the first bar chart, interesting of the subject is the most influential reason for adults to study with result is around 40%. Followed by the reason to gain qualifications, which only 2% difference with the largest proportion. Out of 100, 22 adults believe that study would support their current job. Moreover, 20% people want to continue their study because of getting promotions and having fun by learning. Changing their jobs and meeting other people take up the smallest proportion of these reasons (12% and 9%).


It is noticeable that 40% individual should pay for their own study. The following fees could paid by employer, which result is 35%. After that, the taxpayper takes 35% of the course fees.

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The two diagrams give information about the outcome of adult educations.

The outcome of adult education would be how many people graduated, how many did not finish, and what they did after completing their education. It has no relationship to the bar graph or pie chart. You did not give the instructions, so I can only comment that this first sentence is inappropriate and off-topic.


The first figure Is it a graph or a process map or a flow chart? Please tell the reader what the diagram is.) illustrates (wrong word. "illustrate" means to make a picture. This is ok for maps and photographs, but not for graphs..) the motive (One motive?) why adults want to continue their study and the other one (Is it the same type of graphic?) presents how the course fees should by funded.


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