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Ever since I was a year or fifteen I’ve been saying: “One day I will go to the United States of America, to study, to live or to go on vacation, I don’t care, I just want to go there.” And now is my chance to go and fulfill my dreams and even to make it an enrichment of knowledge.

Now the question is: “Why would I choose for America?” This doesn’t just stop with one reason, I got multiple reasons for why I want to go to the United States of America and to study abroad.

First of all, the United States of America are highly recommended for studying computer science because of their technologically advancements they make every year, so, for an applied computer science student, like me, this is the place to be.

Almost every big company known by consumers in this sector is based in the United States of America, for example: Adobe, Microsoft, Apple, Google, etc. All of these companies are a great inspiration for students like me and will somehow guide me in my further career. These companies make me remember why I started studying applied computer science, to work in a company and giving me the ability to say: “I work in that one company that develops things you use every day and every day we develop new things”. I also like to watch conferences on YouTube of some of these companies; I try to watch the Google I/O every year to see what the new technologically advancements are for that company and to know what the ‘world of tomorrow’ will bring me and of course another dream of mine is to go to this conference once I have the chance and ability. That, of course, is not the only reason why I chose for the United States of America.

I have also heard that they offer unique courses which I cannot follow here in Belgium, which would be a great advantage for my further career. I would also like to build up an international career and so this would be a great experience to boost my international career opportunities for my future and a great boost for my English which is also great for my future career especially if I go international. Studying abroad would also be a great way to improve my independency as I will be far away from my family for a long time and I think it’s also great to improve social skills and meeting new people always is a good reason to go abroad. I would also like to get to know the American way of life, a new and different culture to me, for example the catholic belt, experience how catholic the American people actually are. I would also like to know how ‘big’ everything really is in the United States of America because everybody always tells me everything is much bigger in the United States of America.
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Hi Chris Roijens;

Here are some suggestions.

You need to make this cover letter more unique to yourself. Everyone who would write such a letter wants to live in the US, get a good start on their career, work for Google, etc. You need to make yourself stand out from all the other applicants. What makes you different and unique?

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Ever since I was a year or fifteen (this is not an English expression - instead "ever since I can remember") I’ve been saying: “One day I will go to the United States of America, to study, to live or to go on vacation, I don’t care, I just want to go there.” And now (I have my chance...) is my chance to go and fulfill my dreams and even to make it an enrichment of knowledge.

Now the question is: “Why would I choose for (either "choose America" or "opt for America") America?” This doesn’t just stop with one reason, I got have (got is very casual and should not be used in formal writing) multiple reasons for why I want to go to the United States of America and to study abroad.
First of all, the United States of America are is (the country is singular) highly recommended for studying computer science because of their technologically the technological advancements they make every year, so, for an applied computer science student, (n comma) like me, this is the place to be.

Almost every big company known by consumers in this sector is based in the United States of America, for example: Adobe, Microsoft, Apple, Google, etc. All of these companies are a great inspiration for students like me and will somehow guide me in my further career. These companies make me remember why I started studying applied computer science, to work in a company and giving me the ability to say: “I work in that one company that develops things you use every day and every day we develop new things”. I also like to watch conferences on YouTube --of-- which feature some of these companies; I try to watch the Google I/O every year to see what the new technologically advancements are for offered by that company and to know what the ‘world of tomorrow’ will bring me and of course another dream of mine is to go to this conference once I have the chance and ability. (The last sentence is very long and has more than one idea. Consider making 2 sentences) That, of course, is not the only reason why I chose for the United States of America.

I have also heard that they (who?) offer unique courses which I cannot follow here in Belgium, which would be a great advantage for my further career. I would also like to build up an international career and so this would be a great experience to boost my international career opportunities for my future and a great boost for my English which is also great for my future career especially if I go international.. (The last sentence is very long and has more than one idea.) Studying abroad would also be a great way to improve my independency(?) as I will be far away from my family for a long time and I think it’s also great to improve social skills and meeting new people always is a good reason to go abroad. I would also like to get to know the American way of life, a new and different culture to me, for example the catholic(?) belt, experience how catholic(?) the American people actually are. I would also like to know how ‘big’ everything really is in the United States of America because everybody always tells me everything is much bigger in the United States of America.
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Thanks, but what do you meen by the 'catholic(?)' ?

I've edited my text and this my current version:

Dear sir/madam,

my name is Chris Roijens and I wish to study abroad with the help of the Magellan exchange program.

Ever since I can remember I've been saying: “One day I will go to the United States of America, to study, to live or to go on vacation, I don’t care, I just want to go there.” And now I have my chance to go and fulfill my dreams and even to make it an enrichment of knowledge.

Now the question is: “Why would I opt for America?” This doesn't just stop with one reason, I have multiple reasons for why I want to go to the United States of America and to study abroad.

First of all, the United States of America is highly recommended for studying computer science because of the technological advancements they make every year, so, for an applied computer science student, like me, this is the place to be.
Almost every big company known by consumers in this sector is based in the United States of America, for example: Adobe, Microsoft, Apple, Google, etc. All of these companies are a great inspiration for students like me and will somehow guide me in my career.
These companies make me remember why I started studying applied computer science, to work in a company and give me the ability to say: “I work in that one company that develops things you use every day and every day we develop new things”. I also like to watch conferences on YouTube which feature some of these companies; I try to watch Google I/O every year to see what the new technological advancements are offered by that company and to know what the ‘world of tomorrow’ will bring me. Of course another dream of mine is to go to this conference once I have the chance and ability. That, of course, is not the only reason why I chose for United States of America.

I have also heard that some universities in the United States of America offer unique courses which I cannot follow here in Belgium, which would be a great advantage for my career. I would also like to build up an international career and so this would be a great experience to boost my international career opportunities for my future and a great boost for my English which is also great for my future career especially if I go international. Studying abroad would also be a great way to improve my independency as I will be far away from my family for a long time and I think it’s also great to improve social skills and meeting new people always is a good reason to go abroad. I would also like to get to know the American way of life, a new and different culture to me, for example the catholic belt, experience how catholic the American people actually are.
I would also like to know how ‘big’ everything really is in the United States of America because everybody always tells me everything is much bigger in the United States of America.
Chris RoijensThanks, but what do you meen by the 'catholic(?)' ?
I have not heard the expression "catholic belt," and don't know what you mean when you say "how catholic the people are."