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Topic: Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
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In our time, some people may hold the idea of living in a small town meanwhile others prefer to live in a big city. While both the two choices may have their own features, they can be chosen by different groups of people of society. In contrast to a great extent of people who argue that living in small towns is better than living in big cities, I myself deem living in big cities is more sagacious. There are numerous conspicuous aspects why I prefer to live in a big city, some of which I would mention here. The main reason for my propensity for this idea is that lots of facilities which are necessary for education are concentrated in big cities. Besides, the worth noticing fact why I advocate the issue of living in big cities is that in these kind of cities there are lots of work opportunities for youths. Furthermore, it is undeniable fact that in big cities the recreation facilities are more than small cities.
Education and the related matters play an incredible role in our life. Our future depends to a significant extent on our ability and knowledge. Statistically when we assess the quality of education facilities in large cities and in small cities, we can easily notice that the education conditions in big cities are better than small cities.
Moreover, in metropolises due to its development in industrial field, the work opportunities are more than small cities. We know that the work is one of the premiere requirements for life of all youths. Many youths and families prefer to live in big cities and stand against its difficulties, but have a good work and outcome. For instance, a lot of my friends who live in small cities immigrate to metropolises for the sake of work opportunities.
In addition, besides work, people need to rest and have recreations in their life. People get bored of day to day life, business and work and need to change their moods. People need to have recreation in their life and it provides the related requirements. In big cities, there are a lot of this kind of facilities that people can spend their free times there.
In a word, taking into all the aforementioned factors, we may logically reach the conclusion that living in big cities can be more enjoyable and better for people. In these kind of cities, people can provide better life for themselves and their families and also guarantee the future of their children.
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Hi Amir,

Essays are highly structured formal texts, and that is what the teacher expects from you to produce. Structure is very important! Always plan out your essays before you start writing them.

In the introduction, you need:
- A general statement: This introduces the topic/issue to the reader.
- Background: 1 or 2 sentences to provide some details about the topic.
- Your thesis/purpose statement: Explains your position regarding the essay question.

Then you need some body paragraphs. Each paragraph should deal with only one point/idea!
In each body paragraph you need:
- Topic sentence: This introduces the point you want to explain in the paragraph. It must relate to the essay topic too.
- Supporting sentences: These elaborate on and explain the point.
- Example sentences: These give specific examples to prove the point.

Conclusion:
- Concluding sentence: This restates your position, and typically starts with "In conclusion,"
- One or two sentences summarizing the findings of your body paragraphs.


In your case, you could write one body paragraph about the better work/career opportunities in big cities, and another about the better living (e.g. healthcare or educational) facilities there.


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I sincerely appreciate your assistance.Thank you
You're welcome Amir. Emotion: smile
Rewrite your essay bearing in mind the points I mentioned and post it to the forum.

Hello, I would like to participate in this topic. I appreciate your help very much if you can help me correct it. Thanks

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Topic: Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

While moving to a big city is one of the current approaches of many people, some others do not. Instead, they are keen on living in a small town which is also my preference when I retire.

Living in a big city with more convenience, high quality of education, services and healthcare, and rich opportunities of jobs always attract many people, especially young people. It Is also the trend and the current problem in some developing countries where a large number of young people are aggregating at big cities to study and work. It makes these cities, such as Ho Chi Minh in Vietnam, Bangkok in Thailand, Jakarta in Indonesia, extremely crowded and, consequently, noisy and polluted. They afford difficult conditions to study and work such as living in a very small room, and expensive facilities where they believe a better life in future. In fact, many of them do not want to come back their hometowns where they cannot find any chances for their jobs.

However, the opposite trend is happening with many others who are seeking a life in a small town or village. Especially, some successful people investigate a big amount of money to build villas and penthouses in the countrysides as their private resorts where they can enjoy their lives. Many people who are retired move back to their hometowns and enjoy their rest lives in small towns where they can relax with a peaceful and fresh environment.

It is also my preference and plan for my future when I will retire. Recently, I have to work and attempt to earn money. Hence, I want to live in a big city to have the best condition for myself, my children and my family to live, work, and study.

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In conclusion, although living in a big city has advantages such as better healthcare, education and employment opportunities, many people are choosing to live or retire in smaller towns to escape the pollution, noise and stress of big cities.

It is also my preference and plan for my future when I will retire. Recently, I have to work and attempt to earn money. Hence, I want to live in a big city to have the best condition for myself, my children and my family to live, work, and study.

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Thank you for your correction. I have some questions as follows:

1. I see that you use "on the one hand" but I do not see "on the other hand". Could we use it without the remaining one?

2. In this question they ask about explaining the answer. In the introduction, I said that I prefer to live in a small town. So, I think that we should conclude with the same idea as introduced. As I understand, the conclusion does not go on the same way, and therefore it does not answer why I like that.

Thanks

blueskysg1. I see that you use "on the one hand" but I do not see "on the other hand". Could we use it without the remaining one?

Yes, it's possible. Note that "However" can sometimes substitute for "on the other hand".

blueskysg2. In this question they ask about explaining the answer. In the introduction, I said that I prefer to live in a small town. So, I think that we should conclude with the same idea as introduced. As I understand, the conclusion does not go on the same way, and therefore it does not answer why I like that.

The conclusion and introduction have different roles and should not be the same. See my answer to the OP.

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