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Some people think that sports in schools are a waste of time and resources, while others believe it is a vital part of education.

Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.


We already live in an age when many of us are addicted to technology which makes humans gradually become slothful. It is said that physical coaching in schools is a waste of time and facilities, even though some people hold the belief that it is a fundamental part of education. The following paragraphs discuss whether to play sports or concentrate to study and reach a reasonable conclusion.


In the first thesis, we will consider how sports affect scholars and the shortcomings of this. When playing sports strenuously, we have a high proclivity to be wounded. It results in distracting the overall mark which is decided efforts. By way of illustration, if one is heavily injured, it is an emergency to bring the person who hurts by the accident in sports to hospitalize. After that, they will follow a long course in medical treatment to recuperate. A part of the brain will be in hibernation and a patient is not able to attend classes. A lot of necessary lectures will be skipped and they don't take any alternatives except renounce the rest of the study. Continuing to focus on training activities, is going to interrupt lubrication. Therefore, the theoretical scores will be decreased.


On the contrary, sports are not completely harmful as we think, it also has many advantages. It’s a good route to improve a healthy body and mind in the long run. Humans can do anything with a stressful body, but when we feebleness, only breathing is still challenging. Doing sports in school teaches us to practice industry, strong will, and ambition to climb to the top of the goal. Furthermore, It widens the connection and boosts self-confidence to make a friend develop personalities, and integrate. For instance, they can exchange with upper classmates and get some benefits like reputation. By dint of there reasons, sports is good in many edges aspect.

All things considered, although it seems to look like the minus is equal to the plus, we can negate the main purpose of the student is to study. Balance sports and study is the best choice to have comprehensive development in education.

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We already live in an age when where many of us, [ ] including young students, are not getting sufficient physical exercise. addicted to technology which makes humans gradually become slothful. It is said Moreover, some people believe that physical coaching education in schools is a waste of time and effort, facilities, even though some people but others disagree and hold the belief that it is a fundamental part of education. [ ] I tend to concur with the latter view. The following paragraphs discuss whether to play sports or concentrate to study and reach a reasonable conclusion.

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[ 1]: You need to remain focus on the topic.

[ 2]: You must take a position and clearly outline it in the last sentence of the introduction.

Take a look at my replies in the following threads to learn about essay structure.

https://www.englishforums.com/English/EssayAgreeDisagreeYoungEnjoyLife-Older/bjnlwx/post.htm

https://www.englishforums.com/English/CanAnyoneCheckEssay/bwpzmg/post.htm

Note also that you wrote 355 words, which is too long. You simply do not have enough time in the exam for that! Write clear and concise sentences. Do not unnecessarily complicate your phrasing. Instead, focus on presenting clever/convincing ideas and examples to persuade the reader (examiner) that your essay is of high quality.

Revise your essay taking in mind the above comments, and repost it below if you like. Aim for a maximum length of 270 words.