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I wrote this essay today.

I am sure that there are some mistakes in this essay.

I really hope to learn from those mistakes that I make.

However, I know that it will spend too much of your time, if I ask you to correct the whole essay for me.

Therefore, I really hope you can correct five mistakes from this essay for me.

Your helping will be appreciated.

Thank You so much.

Good Deeds 26 Nov 2010

One of my friends told me that people with great intelligence liked to do good deeds. I did not understand it at the time, as I did not know the benefits of being helpful. However, I do not know why I can not forget this sentence. After paying attention and thinking about it, there are some ideas about doing good deeds crossing my mind, but I think those ideas are just a part of why and how to have good deeds. This is because I think doing good deeds is deep knowledge.

Here are some ideas that have crossed my mind. Let me tell you my ideas about the benefits of being helpful first.

I think that it will never be a lost investment to help other people. Why? This is because there are too many benefits of helping others people. First, we will have a chance to sharpen our strong points to help others with our strong points. If we performance well, the people we help will work like an advertisement. They will promote our strong points to others. Then, we will get more. Second, we all have our weak points; we all have some times that we need others’ helping. If we help other people with our strong points, other people will help us with their strong points too. Third, if we always give other people information, other people will give us some information too. Some of the information from other people is really useful. Fourth, According to a research, people who tend to support others will have stronger ability to deal with stress. Fifth, if we are kind, caring, and loving to other people, other people will treat us in the same way too. Then, we will have more friends and more people to care about us. I am sure that this will definitely bright up our life. There are a lot of other benefits too.

Now, let me tell you my ideas about how to be helpful to other people.

First, we can help other people, when they need us to help them with our strong points. For example, I am good at speed reading, if my friends need me to teach them speed-reading. If I am free, I will teach them.

I want to remind you that being helpful does not mean to be a lousy good man. I hope that you do not help others’ people with your weak points. This is because if you help others with your weak points, you can not ensure that you will be able to help them. At the end, you may end up with harming them or wasting their time. The second consequence can be that, if you spend time helping others with your weak points, you may lose the time to sharpen your strong points. Then, you may not be able to help others with your strong points, as you may slip back in your strong points.

Second, share our information to our friends. First, we can set up a blog to share our ideas to our friends. Through blogging, other people can learn from our ideas, we can also learn from them from their feedbacks. We can also share our information with them when having lunch with them and so forth.

Third, concern the people around us and be caring and loving to them. Here are some of my ideas. We can say thank you to other people when they help us. This simple action will make their days. We can also end our messages with some cute signs, like this ^@^. I believe that it can put a smile on their face.

My Fourth idea is that, try to do as many good deeds as possible if they do not spend too much of our time. For example, support our friends when they need our support. It is something like saying “Go! Go! Go!” to other friends, when they need our support. Second, when we are out for buying breakfast, we can buy for our parents or our roommates at the same time too. There are also a lot of ways. You need to explore by yourselves.

At the end, I really believe that they are a lot of other benefits and ways of being a helpful person. Therefore, I really suggest you to be helpful.
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One of my friends told me that people with great intelligence like to do good deeds. I did not understand it at the time, as I did not know the benefits of being helpful. However, I do not know why I can not forget this sentence. After paying attention and thinking about it, there are some ideas about doing good deeds crossing my mind, but I think those ideas are just a part of why and how to do good deeds. This is because I think doing good deeds is deep knowledge.

Here are some ideas that have crossed my mind. Let me tell you my ideas about the benefits of being helpful first.

I think that it will never be a lost investment to help other people. Why? This is because there are too many benefits of helping other people. First, we will have a chance to sharpen our strong points by helping others. If we perform well, the people we help will work like an advertisement. They will promote our strong points to others. Then, we will get more. Second, we all have our weak points; we all have some times that we need others’ help. If we help other people with our strong points, other people will help us with their strong points too. Third, if we always give other people information, other people will give us some information too. Some of the information from other people can be really useful. Fourth, According to a research, people who tend to support others will have stronger ability to deal with stress. Fifth, if we are kind, caring, and loving to other people, other people will treat us in the same way too. Then, we will have more friends and more people to care about us. I am sure that this will definitely brighten up our lives. There are a lot of other benefits too.

Now, let me tell you my ideas about how to be helpful to other people.

First, we can help other people when they need us to help them with our strong points. For example, I am good at speed reading, if my friends need me to teach them speed-reading and if I am free, I will teach them.

I want to remind you that being helpful does not mean (to be a lousy good man) - doesn't make sense. I hope that you do not help others’ people with your weak points. This is because if you help others with your weak points, you can not ensure that you will be able to help them. At the end, you may end up with harming them or wasting their time. The second consequence can be that, if you spend time helping others with your weak points, you may lose the time to sharpen your strong points. Then, you may not be able to help others with your strong points, as you may slip back in your strong points.

Second, share our information to our friends. First, we can set up a blog to share our ideas to our friends. Through blogging, other people can learn from our ideas, we can also learn from them from their feedbacks. We can also share our information with them when having lunch with them and so forth.

Third, be concerned about the people around us and be caring and loving to them. Here are some of my ideas. We can say thank you to other people when they help us. This simple action will make their days. We can also end our messages with some cute signs, like this ^@^. I believe that it can put a smile on their face.

My Fourth idea is that, try to do as many good deeds as possible if they do not spend too much of our time. For example, support our friends when they need our support. It is something like saying “Go! Go! Go!” to other friends, when they need our support. Second, when we are out for buying breakfast, we can buy for our parents or our roommates at the same time too. There are also a lot of ways. You need to explore by yourselves.

At the end, I really believe that there are a lot of other benefits and ways of being a helpful person. Therefore, I really suggest you to be helpful.
Thank you Anne 58.

I have learnt a leason from your correction.

Can you please tell me your opinion about my writing?

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The ideas?

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Your helping is really appreaciated.