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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


It is widely believed that human beings are living in an unprecedented age of options where we are flooded with a substantial number of choices. I totally agree with this and that is all thanks to the revolutionary advancement of technology.

The Internet and globalisation has been bombarding us with infinite choices. It is ranging from something that serves our daily needs to other aspects of our lives such as our education and career. To illustrate, until recently, Starbucks has proudly introduced more than 80,000 beverage options for us to choose from. Hence, there will be very little chances where we cannot pick up our preferred options. Besides, online shopping is another worth-mentioning example where there are countless of products for us to look for even when we single out our need one by typing their names on the search engine. Apart from that, high school students are often overwhelmed with a big deal of major options which takes them days to decide on the most suitable one.

Although we are surrounded with choices, it is considered more a boon than a bane. Firstly, having too many options ironically drives us away from picking up our final decision. This is mainly due to the fact that all commercial are seeking for our attention to their products by presenting all their positive aspects. Hence, even after we have come up with our most suitable choice, we can still be distracted by the benefits of others. Besides, overloading with options potentially leads to frustration and eventually stress for we may take a lot of time doing so but end up not reaching our last option. In short, being provided with a vast number of information, instead, paralyses our decision-making ability.

To sum up, despite being provided with a diversity of options, we still find it hard to decide which is the most suitable for us. Hence, in order to eliminate the unnecessary choices, we need to be sure of our requirements as well as if that thing is affordable to us.

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It is widely believed that human beings (Do not use "human beings" or "humans" except in comparison with other animal species.) We are living in an unprecedented age of options where we are flooded with a substantial number of choices. I totally agree with this and that is all thanks to the revolutionary advancement of technology. (That does not answer the essay prompt.. The question was not "do we have a lot of choices", but "do we have too many choices." )

The Internet and globalisation has been bombarding us with infinite choices. It is ranging from something that serves our daily needs to other aspects of our lives such as our education and career. To illustrate this, until recently, Starbucks has proudly introduced more than 80,000 beverage options for us to choose from. Hence, there will be very little chances where we cannot pick up our preferred options. Besides, online shopping is another worth-mentioning example worth mentioning where there are countless of products for us to look for even when we single out our need one (wrong phrase) by typing their names on in the search box engine. Apart from that, high school students are often overwhelmed with a big deal (wrong words) of major options (For what? ) which takes them days to decide on the most suitable one.

Although we are surrounded with choices, it is considered more a boon than a bane. Firstly, First, having too many options ironically drives us away from picking up (wrong phrase) our final decision. This is mainly due to the fact that all commercial (wrong form) are seeking (wrong word - vying / competing ) for our attention to their products by presenting all their positive aspects. Hence, even after we have come up with our most suitable choice, we can still be distracted by the benefits of others. Besides, being overloaded overloading with options potentially leads to frustration and eventually stress for we may take a lot of time comparing them doing so but end up not reaching (wrong word - selecting) our last option. In short, being provided with a vast number (wrong word. "information is non-count. You cannot number it.) of information, instead, paralyses (wrong word. This is a noun.) our decision-making ability.

To sum up, despite being provided with a diversity of options, we still find it hard to decide which is the most suitable for us. Hence, in order to eliminate the unnecessary choices, we need to be sure of our requirements as well as if that thing is affordable to us. (You did not have that point in your body paragraphs. Do not add new information in the conclusion. Restate your thesis from the first paragraph and summarize the main points. Your thesis statement mentioned technology, but you did not develop the idea consistently.)


Comment: Too much choice is not about technology. Look at the breakfast aisle in a supermarket, for example.

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Thank you so much!

What about this correction?

We are living in an unprecedented age of options where we are flooded with a substantial number of choices. I totally agree with this and believe that this is rather disadvantageous.

Our lives have been bombarded with infinite choices. It is ranging from something that serves our daily needs to other aspects of our lives such as our education and career. To illustrate this, Starbucks has proudly introduced more than 80,000 beverage options for us to choose. Hence, there will be very little chances where we cannot pick up our preferred options. Besides, online shopping is another example worth mentioning where there are countless products for us to look for even when we single out our need one by typing their names in the search box. Apart from that, high school students are often overwhelmed with an array of major options to study for which takes them days to decide on the most suitable one.

Although we are surrounded with choices, it is considered more a boon than a bane. First, having too many options ironically drives us away from coming up to our final decision. This is mainly due to the fact that commercials are competing for our attention to their products by presenting all their positive aspects. Hence, even after we have come up with our most suitable choice, we can still be distracted by the benefits of others. Besides, being overloaded with options potentially leads to frustration and eventually stress for we may take a lot of time comparing them but end up not reaching our last option. In short, being provided with a vast amount of information, instead, paralyses our decision-making ability.

To sum up, despite being provided with a diversity of options, we still find it hard to decide which is the most suitable for us. Hence, as we are living in a pool of choices, it is perhaps better for us to have a wise decision and eliminate the unnecessary choices.

We are living in an unprecedented age of options where we are overwhelmed flooded with a substantial the numbers of choices. I totally agree with this and believe that this is rather disadvantageous.

Our lives have been bombarded with infinite choices at every turn. It is ranging from something that serves our daily needs, like cornflakes, to other more substantial aspects of our lives such as our education and career. To illustrate this, Starbucks has proudly introduced more than 80,000 (That seems like an exaggeration!) beverage options for us to choose from. Hence, there will be very little chance that chances where we cannot find exactly what we desire. pick up our preferred options. Besides, online shopping is another example worth mentioning. When we go to shop on Amazon or one if its large competitors and specify exactly what we want in the search box, the query returns page after page of results of different brands, colors, sizes, prices, and customer reviews. where there are countless products for us to look for even when we single out our need one (That is totally wrong English.) by typing their names (wrong match - one is 1. Names is many.) in the search box. Apart from that, high school students are often perplexed by the array of different ways to overwhelmed with an array of major options to continue their education, and it study for which takes them weeks or months days to decide on the most suitable one.

Although we are surrounded with choices, it is considered more a boon than a bane. First, having too many options ironically drives us away from coming up to our final decision. (Is that a good thing?) This is mainly due to the fact that commercials are competing for our attention to their products by presenting all their positive aspects. Hence, even after we have come up with our most suitable choice, we can still be distracted by the benefits of others. Besides, being overloaded with options potentially leads to frustration and eventually stress, (Is that a good thing?) for we may take a lot of time comparing them but end up not settling on reaching our last option. In short, being provided with a vast amount of information, instead, paralyses our decision-making ability. (Is that a good thing? I don't understand this paragraph. You first state that it is really good (a boon) to have all these choices but you then contradict this idea with a lot of negative points.)

To sum up, despite being provided with a diversity of options, we still find it hard to decide which is the most suitable for us. Hence, as we are living in a pool world of choices, it is perhaps better for us to have a strategy for making a wise decision by ignoring or and eliminating extraneous e the unnecessary choices.

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Thank you so much, the second paragraph is actually "a bane rather than a boon"

Here is the correction of it, can you help me evaluate it?

Although we are surrounded with choices, it is considered more a bane than a boon. First, having too many options ironically drives us away from coming up to our final decision. This is mainly due to the fact that commercials are competing for our attention to their products by presenting all their positive aspects. Hence, even after we have come up with our most suitable choice, we can still be distracted by the benefits of others. Besides, being overloaded with options potentially leads to frustration and eventually stress for we may take a lot of time comparing them but end up not reaching our last option. In short, being provided with a vast amount of information, instead, paralyses our decision-making ability.

Effio DinhAlthough we are surrounded with choices, it is considered more a bane than a boon.

Although we are surrounded with choices, having too many of them is considered more of a a bane than a boon.

Effio DinhFirst, having too many options ironically drives us away from coming up to our final decision.

First, having too many options ironically, it deters us from making conclusive decisions.

You write "first", but there is no "second" in the rest of the paragraph. In this sentence "it" refers to the previous "having too many". The "it" in the previous sentence did not have a clear antecedent. "Surrounded by choices" is different from "having an excess"

Effio DinhThis is mainly due to the fact that commercials are competing for our attention to their products by presenting all their positive aspects.

The problem here is that you have suddenly narrowed the context to advertised products, but the choices are far more broad than that. Convert it to an example from your personal experience, and the logic will flow much better.

For example, I see a lot of advertisements for fast food: chicken, Chinese take-out, and hamburgers. They all look delicious, but I might just end up having noodles, and then regret not going to the local Kentucky Fried Chicken. This experience applies to other areas like clothing, shoes, games and where to go on holiday.

Effio DinhBeing overloaded with options potentially leads to frustration and eventually stress for we may take a lot of time comparing them but end up not reaching a satisfactory conclusion. our last option.