This table demonstrates the average distance in miles commuted per person in 1985 and 2000.

It can be clearly seen that cars were the most prevalent mode of transport with the highest number of miles travelled, surpassing local buses and others by 8 times in both years .

Turning to details, the distance drived by car users rose dramatically from 3199 to 4806, occupying approximately 70% of all modes in 2000. By contrast, taxis stood at the bottom of the list with only 13 miles each person in 1985, and then negligibly grew to 42 miles in the next 15 years.

Both bicycles and walking witnessed a downward trend when the former’s distance fell moderately from 51 to 41 miles and the latter decreased from 255 to 237 miles. As opposed to going jogging and riding bikes, the distance individuals using long distance buses, which was only responsible for 54 miles, began to see an exponential growth to 124 miles in 2000, outnumbering taxis by 3 times.

Strikingly, the number of miles travelled by bicycles and taxis were almost equal to each other in 2000.



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Phương Linh Bùi demonstrates

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Phương Linh BùiIt can be clearly seen that

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Phương Linh BùiBoth bicycles and walking witnessed

Bicycles cannot have experiences. They have no feelings or senses.

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This table shows the average rate of distance in miles commuted per person in 1985 and 2000.

Overall, cars were the most prevalent mode of transport with the highest number of miles travelled, surpassing local buses and others by 8 times in both years .

Turning to details, the distance driven by car users rose dramatically from 3199 to 4806, occupying approximately 70% of all modes in 2000. By contrast, taxis stood at the bottom of the list with only 13 miles each person in 1985, and then negligibly grew to 42 miles in the next 15 years.

There was a downward trend in the rate of using bicycle and walking per person when the former’s distance fell moderately from 51 to 41 miles and the latter decreased from 255 to 237 miles. As opposed to going jogging and riding bikes, the distance individuals using long distance buses, which was only responsible for 54 miles, began to see an exponential growth to 124 miles in 2000, outnumbering taxis by 3 times.

Strikingly, the number of miles travelled by bicycles and taxis were almost equal to each other in 2000.

There are mistakes in the table you posted. It is not "cur" - which means a mongrel dog, it is "car". And it is not "long dustance" but "long distance."


This table shows the average rate (Wrong word. There is no such thing as "rate of distance". There is "rate of speed" which is how fast you are going. It is measured in kilometers or miles per hour. For example, the speed limit on this road is 50 km/hour) of distance in miles commuted (wrong word. "Commuted" means that the time to spend in jail or prison for a criminal was forgiven.) per person in 1985 and 2000. (Your information is incomplete. How many rows? What were they?)

Overall, cars were the most prevalent mode of transport with the highest number of miles travelled, surpassing local buses and others by 8 times (That does not make sense.) in both years .

Turning to details, the distance driven by car users (wrong expression.) rose dramatically from 3199 to 4806, occupying (Wrong word. ) approximately 70% of all modes in 2000. By contrast, taxis stood at the bottom of the list with only 13 miles for each person in 1985, and then negligibly grew to 42 miles in 2000. the next 15 years.

There was a downward trend (Wrong expression. Trend is only for line graphs, not for a table with only two data points.) . in the rate of using bicycle (Wrong expression) and walking per person when the former’s distance (Wrong expression) fell moderately from 51 to 41 miles and the latter decreased from 255 to 237 miles. As opposed to going jogging (I do not see that option in the list.) and riding bikes, the distance individuals (I do not know what that means.) using long distance buses, which was only responsible for 54 miles, began to see (wrong word. Miles cannot see anything.) an exponential growth (Wrong expression - One can only see these types of curves on a line graph. There is logarithmic, linear, and exponential curves. How can you see the shape with only two values? )to 124 miles in 2000, outnumbering (poor word choice.) taxis by 3 times. (You do not need another paragraph.)

Strikingly, (Do not use sensational words in Task 1. Just describe the information) the number of miles travelled by bicycles and taxis were almost equal to each other in 2000.


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Outline:

Paragraph 1: describe the table and the row and column headers. Group the rows into types of transport.

Paragraph 2: Pick out the main features. There are three: 1) total distance increased.2) three modes decreased 3) most travel was by car.

Paragraph 3: Make comparisons. Combine categories. Compare total miles in these categories.


The table lists the average distances travelled per person yearly for seven named means of transportation in 1985 and 2000. Besides that, it gives the total distance and a category for all other modes. The categories include three for public transportation (train and local and long distance bus), three for personal means (walking, biking and driving), and taxis.

Overall, the total distance increased even though there were decreases in three of the categories, walking, biking and local bus. The largest proportion of travel was by car.

In detail, two-thirds of the total distance in 1985 (3199 out of 4740 miles) was by car, and it went up to nearly three-quarters in 2000 (4806 out of 6475). People rode public transportation about the same distances, 764 miles in 2000 compared to 722 in 1985; however the miles traveled by train and long distance bus both increased at the expense of local busses, which declined from 429 to 274 miles. Walking and biking added up to 306 miles in 1985, compared to 278 in 2000. Other means accounted for just under 10% of the total in both years.

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