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Can you please check my grammar?

If you can rewrite my sentences to a better form, please feel free to do it.

In this short paper, i have to briefly talk about the priority actions that the company has to be taken when a crisis occurrs



Priority actions when the crisis occurred

The company should have five priority actions to response to the crisis.

When a crisis occurred, the company should act immediately.

The company should form a crisis team, assign spoken person, and address the message to the public. The message needs to be clear, concise, and in one voice. In addition, the company should dispel any rumor from spreading.

After addressing, the company should start internal investigation by hiring external organizations because if a company investigates internally, the public may judge the accuracy of the results. In addition, the company should communicate with FDA with the latest investigation.

The third priority action is that the company should communicate with the company’s lawyers to get ready for future lawsuit settlements, and ask for legal advices.

The forth action is that the company should contact the product management department. The company should make sure that they locate the infected products, find the causes of the products, identify suppliers that are affected, and contact consumer affairs.

The final priority action is that the company should contact the consumer affair. If recall is necessary, the company should provide retailers with instruction, inform the customers about the recall, and get ready to answer questions from the customers.

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I think your writng is about the past crisis. If you talk about crisis in the future, I will change few things.

Priority actions when the crisis occurrS

The company MUST have five priority actions to response to the crisis.

When THE crisis occurrs, the company MUST act immediately.

The company MUST formS a crisis team, assignING spoken person, and addressING the message to the public. The message needs to be clear, concise, and (TO BE?) in one voice. In addition, the company MUST STOP any rumorS from spreading.

After addressing, the company MUST start internal investigation by hiring external organizations because if a company investigates internally, the public may HAVE DOUBTS ON the accuracy of the results. MOREOVER, the company MUST communicate with FDA ON the latest investigation.

The third priority is that the company MUST communicate with the company’s lawyers to get ready for future lawsuit settlements and ask for legal advices.

The FOURTH PRIORITY is that the company MUST contact the product management department. The company MUST make sure that they locate the infected products, find the causes of the products, identify THE PROUCTS OF THE SUPPLIERS that are affected, and THEN contact consumer affairs.

The final priority is that the company MUST contact the consumer affair. If A recall is necessary, the company MUST provide retailers with instruction, inform the customers about the recall, and get ready to answer questions from the customers.

Anyway, that is how I fix it. I hope someone would give you a second opinion.
thx u for checking.

Yes I hope someone can give me a second opinion too
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Are you talking about what happened when a crisis happened in the past, or are you creating a strategy for dealing with any future crises? I think you mean the second, so avoid using past tense. Also, if this is for your specific company it sounds odd to keep using 'the company'. If, however, this is a generic example of a crisis strategy then 'the company' is ok. Are you talking about food products as 'infected' would only seem to apply to food? Stages 4 and 5 seem to be saying the same thing. (By the way, I create crisis strategies as part of my work and I'm not too sure that you have your actions in quite the right order, for example, it is often wise to take legal advice as soon as possible - even as part of stage 1).

Priority actions when a crisis occurs

The company should response to the crisis with the following five priority actions.

1) The company should form a crisis team, assign a spokesperson, and address a message to the public. The message needs to be clear, concise, and in one voice. In addition, the company should dispel any rumors.

2) The company should hire an external organisation to start an internal investigation. If a company investigates internally, the public may not be convinced of the accuracy of the results. In addition, the company should communicate with the FDA about the investigation.

3)The company should communicate with the company’s lawyers to get ready for any future lawsuit settlements and ask for legal advice.

4)The company should contact the product management department. The company should make sure that they locate the infected products, find the causes of the problem, identify suppliers that are affected, and contact consumer affairs.

5) The company should contact the consumer affair (I'm not sure what you mean by this phrase). If a recall is necessary, the company should provide retailers with instructions, inform the customers about the recall, and get ready to answer questions from customers.
Like Nona, I have some thoughts about the logic of your writing - where in your plan do you make sure you are communicating with the employees of your company? With 1), you need to develop your message, not address it. And it should be formed in consultation with your legal counsel, who, as Nona has pointed out, should be involved sooner rather than later in the process.
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Can you please check my grammar?

If you can rewrite my sentences to a better form, please feel free to do it.

In this short paper, i have to briefly talk about the priority actions that the company has to be taken when a crisis occurrs



Priority actions when the crisis occurred

The company should have five priority actions to response to the crisis.

When a crisis occurred, the company should act immediately.

The company should form a crisis team, assign spoken person, and address the message to the public. The message needs to be clear, concise, and in one voice. In addition, the company should dispel any rumor from spreading.

After addressing, the company should start internal investigation by hiring external organizations because if a company investigates internally, the public may judge the accuracy of the results. In addition, the company should communicate with FDA with the latest investigation.

The third priority action is that the company should communicate with the company’s lawyers to get ready for future lawsuit settlements, and ask for legal advices.

The forth action is that the company should contact the product management department. The company should make sure that they locate the infected products, find the causes of the products, identify suppliers that are affected, and contact consumer affairs.

The final priority action is that the company should contact the consumer affair. If recall is necessary, the company should provide retailers with instruction, inform the customers about the recall, and get ready to answer questions from the customers.

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I michelle marasigan, I just want to clear that i am present on date April 2, 2007, my report will be my proof.
Please mark presenet to my attendance on April 2, 2007
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