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1. Most of us are lazy and/or value our time.
Can I say like this?

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Multi-user portals are simply unable to achieve that close interaction between a web site owner and web site visitors, whereas small web sites are.
I am not sure about the "whereas" construction here.

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Negotiating skills, which you, as a web site owner, might gain during this interaction, will not only help you prove yourself as a person whom people can trust, but also will help you succeed in rental.
I would like to know if I can use "will not only help" and "but also will help" here and if I use them correctly.
Thank you!

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Hi,

1. Most of us are lazy and/or value our time.
Can I say like this? Just say 'We all value our time'.No-one wants to be told they are lazy.

2. Multi-user portals are simply unable to achieve that close interaction between a web site owner and web site visitors, whereas small web sites are.
I am not sure about the "whereas" construction here. 'Whereas' contrasts. You are contrasting 'multi-user portals' to 'small web-sites'. Is this the correct comparison?


You are conytrasting abilities, so you need to say . . . are simply unable to . . . whereas . . . can . . .

3. Negotiating skills, which you, as a web site owner, might gain during this interaction, will not only help you prove yourself as a person whom people can trust, but also will help you succeed in rental.
I would like to know if I can use "will not only help" and "but also will help" here and if I use them correctly.


It seems a bit 'wordy'. I'd suggest something like As a web-site owner, you will gain negotiating skills. These will show you are trustworthy, and help you to succeed in the rental business.

Best wishes, Clive
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Thank you, Clive! I appreciate your reply, really. [C]