Topic: The chart below shows average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities.


My essay:

The table compares the average amount of time that British men and women spend on their daily routines.

As is presented in the graph, it takes them more time to sleep than any other activities.

To be more specific, both genders have roughly one-third of a day to sleep, which accounts for the majority of their time. Recreational activities come in second, with men spending half an hour more than women. Further down the lists are daily missions, where there are significant differences in time-distribution patterns between two genders. Male residents work and study for longer hours than females, with 225 minutes and 146 minutes respectively. However, the amount of time intended by women for doing chores and child caring is twice as much as that by men.

When it comes to leisure, it is clear that watching TV/DVD and listening to the radio/music are the most popular activities in the British people's spare time, accounting for 170 minutes for men and 145 minutes for women. Social life and entertainment/ culture are less preferred; each male and female spends around 1.5 hours on these activities.

The table compares the average amount of time that British men and women spend in a 24-hour day on various activities. their daily routines. ("daily routines" does not capture the idea of a 24-hour period, only things done in the waking hours.) Eleven main categories are listed and one, leisure, is further subdivided into five line items.

As is presented in the graph, (Those are useless filler words. Don't waste the reader's time.) it takes them more time (That is a very strange thought. Is sleeping a job that needs to be finished and completed like washing up or combing ones hair?) to sleep than any of the other activities. The list captures nearly completely all the specific activities, as what is left over in the "other" category is only 13 minutes.

(You need to find better ways to group the items in logical sets. It would improve the coherence and cohesion.)

To be more specific, both men and women genders have sleep roughly one-third of the time of a day to sleep, which accounts for the majority of their time. Recreational activities come in second, with men spending half an hour more than women. Further down the lists (You never mentioned any ordering of the items in the table.) are daily missions, (wrong word) where there are significant differences in time-distribution patterns between two genders. (unnatural. "Two genders" makes the reader think about any others.) Male residents (wrong word) work and study for longer hours than females, with 225 minutes and 146 minutes respectively. However, the amount of time intended by women take for doing chores and childcare caring is twice as much as that by men.

When it comes to leisure, it is clear that (Those are useless filler words.) watching TV/DVD and listening to the radio/music are the most popular activities in the British people's spare time, accounting for 170 minutes for men and 145 minutes for women. Social life and entertainment/ culture are less preferred; (There is no indication of preferences here.) each male and female spends around 1.5 hours on these activities.