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Admittedly, some people will work harder to obtain public recognition even though there is no more money given. This is because they feel proud when they walk on the street everyone recognize and admire them. What's more, being famous means they can finish things easily. For example, if a figure lost his watch on the street someday, he can post a message like "I lost my watch on the Brand Street today. Can you give me a hand to find it out" I believe without a few minutes, a large amount of his fans will come out on the Brand Street. These are two motivations that encourage them to pursuit public recognition.
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Admittedly, some people will work harder to obtain public recognition even though there is no monetary incentive. This is because they feel proud when they walk down the street and everyone recognizes and admires them. What's more, being famous means they can finish things easily. For example, if a public figure lost his watch on the street someday, he could post a message like "I lost my watch on the Brand Street today. Can you give me a hand in finding it? out" I believe, within a few minutes, many of his fans would come to the Brand Street. These are two motivations that encourage people to pursue public recognition.

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