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Famous Writers Born After 1980

In recent years, there have emerged a group of young writers, most of them born after 1980. Standing out in the hall of the post-80 writers are, among others, Han Han, Guo Jingming, Yan Ge, Jiang Feng and so on.

Different from other literary works, their works are characterized by straightforwardness, from which we can, without much difficulty, read their setbacks and frustrations in life, and simplicity, which, rarely seen in other works, reflects their pursuit of true love. Also reflected in their works are problems with the education of this generation in their growth.

With the trend growing, this phenomenon has aroused concern among all walks of life. On the one hand, it is criticized by some famous writers; on the other, it has found many supporters among the young.
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Generally, I think I understand the idea of your esay.

group is singular, so your first sentence needs to be changed; you could simply change have to has.

What do you mean by "Standing out in the hall"? The phrase makes me think of a group which is 'outside' of the post-80s writers (waiting in the hall, but not in the room), but I think the meaning is that those authors are 'standing out among the group'. Is that right?

The many commas make the essay difficult to read, but I think they are mostly correct.
Thank you!

By the way, do you think this essay is good, or just so so?
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wangqh2696122Different from other literary works, their works are characterized by straightforwardness, from which we can, without much difficulty, read their setbacks and frustrations in life, and simplicity, which, rarely seen in other works, reflects their pursuit of true love. Also reflected in their works are problems with the education of this generation in their growth.
Hi wangqh,
This is problematic. The first sentence is too long to follow, and you use the word "works" too many times.

You are saying that we can read their frustrations because they write in a straight-forward manner? And you are saying that their simple style of writing is rare and reflects their pursuit of true love?

I don't see the connection between straight-forward writing and frustration, nor between simplicity and true love.
Thanks for your comment. By the way, can you help me to correct the essay?
I have pointed out the problem. I don't know what you want to say about the straight-forward and simple writing style, or about their frustrations.

It needs to be your essay in your words. You may want to start by saying "Their writing style is characterized by..." and take it from there.
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Famous Writers Born After 1980

In recent years, there has emerged many young writers, most of them born after 1980. Standing out in the group of the post-80 writers are, among others, Han Han, Guo Jingming, Yan Ge, Jiang Feng and so on.

Different from other literary works, their works reflect the young writers’ straightforwardness in showing their setbacks and frustrations in life. Also, we can learn from their productions that today’s young people are in the pursuit of true love. Obviously, there have occurred some problems with our current education of this generation in their growth.

The new trend has aroused concern among all walks of life. On the one hand, it is criticized by some famous writers for some reason; on the other, however, it has found many supporters among the young.
I think it's getting better.

In the first sentence, you changed group to many, so you didn't need to change the verb.

Many ...have emerged or

A group has emerged

I would eliminate "and so on" because you've already said "among others".

Obviously? It's not obvious to me. Being frustrated and pursuing love are completely natural. Should education have eliminated these or taught them to be more subtle?

Don't get frustrated...I know it's hard to express deep ideas in a 2nd language.
In China, top priority is given totally to knowlege, with the learners' inner feelings almost neglected. So I use "obviously" ; maybe a Chinese reader can understand it. Thanks!
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