The topic is: Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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My essay:

The influence of advertising on the consumption of goods is so tremendous that it is believed to be the primary commercial stimulation, not the needs of people. In my opinion, I agree without reservation with that statement.

Initially, advertising shows people a formidable array of commodities every day since it is pervasive. Moreover, the desire to possess and experience new brands of consumers is usually high. It is to say that the more regularly potential buyers see commercials, the more presumably they will buy the products advertised. Next, there is a secret behind the success of advertisements in catching people’s attention. In other words, a multitude of money spent by companies to tailor every commercial to consumer tastes can elucidate why it is difficult for most people to escape the circle of consuming unnecessary goods. Therefore, it is easy to comprehend the presence of well-known figures like Leo Messi and Black Pink — you name it, on products’ labels, such as on a Pepsi soda bottle.

On top of that, people tend to consume products that can help them express care for society and the environment instead of sticking to their needs. Due to the fact that living conditions are better now than previously, people begin to think of sharing and protecting nature. This could be the reason why a product advertised to be not only produced by an ecological-friendly process but also used to trade for fundraising will be compelling to consumers. The high sales of indigenous handicrafts or organic products seem to support this idea.

In conclusion, I want to restate my position that advertising is a key factor influencing the sale of a product as it may create false needs for consumers. Furthermore, the lives of people have been greatly improved leading to their willingness in making a purchase as a donation rather than to meet their demand.

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The influence of advertising on the consumption of goods is so tremendous that it is believed to be the primary reason for all purchases, commercial stimulation, not the needs of people. In my opinion, I agree without reservation with that statement.

Initially, (Wrong transition. Initially I bought coke, but now I buy Pepsi.) advertising shows people a formidable array of products and services commodities (A commodity is an item that is sold in bulk to wholesalers and industrial consumers, on the commodity market. Examples are barrels of oil, bales of cotton, bushels of wheat, precious metals, and other raw materials.) every day since it is pervasive. Moreover, the desire to possess and experience new brands of consumers (I did not know that people were branded. Can we buy people?) is usually high. It is to say that (Awkward. These dummy-it clauses are prather ugly and distasteful.) the more regularly potential buyers see commercials, the more presumably (wrong word) they will buy the products advertised. Next, there is a secret behind the success of advertisements in catching people’s attention. In other words, (This means you have another way to say "there is a secret". It does not mean - "this secret is..") a multitude (wrong word. Money is noncount. ) of money spent by companies to tailor every commercial to consumer tastes can explain elucidate why it is difficult for most people to escape the circle (wrong word) of consuming unnecessary goods. Therefore, it is easy to comprehend the presence of well-known figures like Leo Messi and Black Pink — you name it, on products’ labels, such as on a Pepsi soda bottle.

On top of that, people tend to consume products that can help them express care for society and the environment instead of sticking to their needs. Due to the fact that living conditions are better now than previously, people begin to think of sharing and protecting nature. This could be the reason why a product advertised to be not only produced by an ecological-friendly process but also used to trade for fundraising will be compelling to consumers. The high sales of indigenous handicrafts or organic foods products seem to support this idea.

In conclusion, I want to restate my position that advertising is a key factor influencing the sale of a product as it may create false needs for consumers. Furthermore, the lives of people have been greatly improved leading to their willingness in making a purchase as a donation rather than to meet their demands.

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I learned a lot from all the amendments. Thank you for always sparing time to evaluate my essays 😃😃😃 it will take me some time to get hold of good vocab and suitable grammar to use in my writing. through every evaluation, I always have some more motivation to keep going until you can understand all of the ideas I want to express without finding them weird or absurd.

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