You live in a room in college which you share with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because he or she always has friends visiting. They have parties in the room and sometimes borrow your things without asking you. Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room. Explain your reasons.

Dear Accommodation Officer,

I’m writing this letter to complain about recently behavior of my roommate. Since she has moved into the room, I have had to endure the noise from her and her friends’ parties. Besides, she always invites her friends visit our room, which doesn’t notice me anything about the straighter. Accordingly, it impacts on me a lot in studying and my private. Furthermore, there are some equipment of me borrowed without my permission. Although I remind her a lot, it seems continually keep working and I cannot stand this situation.

I would be happy if you gave me a favor that I will be arranged a new room next term, especially a single room. I already pay extra to have my own room, which give me a private and quite place.

I am looking forward to hearing your announcement soon. Please let me know as soon as possible.

Best Regards,

Tâm Nhã Can you give me a feedback and fix the mistakes in IELTS General writing task 1

Feedback is non-count. Do not use "a" or the plural form.

Dear Accommodation Officer, (Better: Housemaster Collins. Housemaster/housemistress is the title of a person in charge of a dormitory. The student would know this person's name, so make up a surname.)

I’m writing this letter to complain about recently (wrong form. An adverb does not modify a noun.) behavior of my roommate. Since she has moved (simple past.) into my the room, I have had to endure the noise from her and her friends’ parties. Besides, she always invites her friends visit our room, without asking me first. which doesn’t notice me anything about the straighter. (I have no idea what you are saying. ) Accordingly, it impacts on bothers me a lot. It is an invasion of my privacy, and I find it difficult to study. in studying and my private. (Be careful of the use of the adjective "private". It can refer to unmentionables.) Furthermore, there are some equipment of me (Do not use "of me". Use the possessive pronoun) they have borrowed my laptop, my clothes and textbooks without my permission. Although I remind her a lot, she continues to disturb me it seems continually keep working and I cannot stand this situation.

I would be happy if you did gave me a favor and arrange a different room for me that I will be arranged (The passive voice is incorrectly used. The manager will not arrange you. ) a new room next term; I would especially like to request a single room. I already (This is not correct. It means that you have a single room right now, which is not the case. You are complaining because you do not have your own room.) I am willing to pay extra to have my own room, which would give me a private and quite place.

I am looking forward to hearing your reply announcement soon. Please let me know as soon as possible.

Best Regards,