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TOPIC: The first graph shows the number of train passengers from 2000 to 2009; the second compares the percentage of trains running on time and target in the period.

The first bar graph provides information about the number of people commuting by trains, while the second compares the proportion of on-time arrivals of trains with the goal over a decade starting in 2000.

Overall, both the quantity of rail travelers and the percentage of trains running on schedule showed considerable variations with an upward trajectory during the given time frame.

Standing at about 36,000 at the beginning of the period, the number of train passengers rose steadily by approximately 6,000 within 2 years, before falling progressively to the same level as that in 2000. This figure went up again during the next 3 years, but more sharply, to a peak of roughly 47,000 citizens in 2005, after which it declined moderately and ended the decade at nearly 42,000 in 2009.

With respect to the percentage trains arriving without delays, there was a substantial increase in the first half of the course, from exactly 92% to 96% in 2004, surpassing the standard line by 1%. This figure, which slumped markedly to 3% lower than the target of 95% on-time trains three years later, reached a high of 97% in 2008 and then leveled off in the final year.

mytraaThe first bar graph

Here are some bar charts, sometimes called bar graphs. There are simple bar charts, stacked bar charts, grouped bar charts and time series bar charts.

You did not upload any bar charts.

That does not say very much. Information can be almost anything. It is not a good way to start.

What values, measures or numbers are on this plot?

mytraa showed considerable variations

Every interesting plot in the entire world will show changes. That is not a "main feature". You are asked to point our the most interesting observations, not something that is very very commonplace.

Study the figure carefully. What stands out? What is peculiar or uncommon?

mytraawith an upward trajectory during the given time frame.

That is not true. It is more staying within a narrow range of about 10% above or below the overall average.

Standing (unnatural word) at about 36,000 (wrong number; in fact all your numbers are wrong. ) at the beginning of the period, the number of train passengers rose steadily by approximately 6,000 within 2 over the next two years, before falling progressively to the same level as that in 2000. This figure (Figure is not a good word here.) It went up again during the next 3 years, but more sharply, to a peak of roughly 47,000 citizens (Wrong word. There may have been some tourists and foreigners riding the trains) in 2005, after which it declined moderately and ended the decade at nearly 42,000 in 2009.

With respect to the percentage trains arriving without delays, there was a substantial increase in the first half of the course, from exactly 92% to 96% in 2004, surpassing the standard line (wrong expression) by 1%. This figure, which Then it slumped markedly to 3% lower than the target of 95% on-time trains (The reader is confused. You never told the reader that the target remained unchanged at 95% for the entire period.) three years later, reached a high of 97% in 2008 and then leveled off in the final year.

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Thanks for your comments. The units of the first line graph is millions, not thousands, so it's my fault for not being careful. Can you please give me a sample of this line graph. Thanks!

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Thanks for your comments. The units of the first line graph is millions, not thousands, so it's my fault for not being careful. Can you please give me a sample of this line graph. Thanks!

You need to study the infographic very closely before you start writing anything. You not only made a mistake on the units, but also the types of plots.

Sample essay:

Note, in the opening paragraph, I use the vague term "give information about" because I want to give the aspects that are common to the two different graphs, the time range and the subject matter. This gives coherence and cohesion to the essay by relating the two graphs to each other.

In the "overall" paragraph, the most important features are the rather small variance in the annual passenger numbers, and the constant performance target, which was not always achieved.

In the "detail" paragraph, pay attention to comparisons. Hold the graphic a distance from your face and focus on the "big picture", not the trivial details.

In this case, there is no apparent correlation between the two graphs, and there is only one category, so you have to compare the values over time. Group the values into smaller time spans and note the peaks and lows.

The two line graphs give information about a certain railway between 2000 and 2009. The first one plots the number of passengers served each year, and the second gives the percentage of trains that were on time and the desired target.

Overall, the target for the performance of the system (percent on schedule) was not changed during the period. In half of the years, the system met or exceeded its performance target. The passenger load did not go very much above or below the overall average for the period.

In detail, this railway system carries between 35 and 46 million passengers, with an average year being around 40 million. There was a peak in 2005 when there were 47 million, and slightly more at the end than the beginning, 41 vs 36 million. The managers of the system had set a fixed performance target of 95% of the trains being on schedule. They were able to achieve that target in two time spans, 2002-2004 and 2008-2009. In the latter, they showed the highest level of performance at 97%. There were two years of significant underperformance, 2000 and 2006, when it was 3% below the goal.

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