Topic: In some countries, some criminal trials in the court are shown on the TV and the general public can watch them. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

It is true that in some countries, there are some criminal trials in the courts shown on the TV so that the general public can watch them. Although this practice can bring about some detrimental effects, I still hold the belief that its positive implications are of greater significance.


The most obvious disadvantage is that allowing court trials to be broadcast on TV may lead to injustice. This is due to the fact that when citizens watch court trials on TV, they may form opinions and criticisms based on mass media bias and a lack of understanding of the legal system. Consequently, public and media pressure would inevitably arise, which might affect the verdict of judges or members of the jury, meaning that justice would not be served. However, this issue could be solved if the public is informed with precise details of shown cases; therefore they would be more able to form fair judgements. Thus, I believe this problem is insignificant.


Nevertheless, I am of the opinion that televising legal proceedings can offer greater benefits, two of which are deterrent to potential criminals and knowledge to prevent similar crimes. Regarding the former, if people intending to commit offenses watch trials on such crimes, they may fear punishments and penalties. As a result, they would abandon the offense or become law-abiding citizens at least in a short period. Coupled with this is that when citizens have the ability to watch trials in the courts shown on TV, they would possibly know how to avoid similar danger. This is because details in testimonies of offenders and stories from plaintiffs can give viewers valuable lessons in order to not become victims.


In conclusion, despite the fact that publishing trials through TV channels may negatively affect the effectiveness of a jury system, deterring potential offenders and informing helpful knowledge to avoid crimes are undeniable advantages this trend can offer. As such, I take the view that this practice, on the whole, is far more advantageous.

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In some countries, there are some criminal trials in the courts are shown on the TV so that everyone the general public can watch them. Although this practice can bring about some detrimental effects, I still hold the belief that its positive implications are of greater significance.

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The most obvious disadvantage (In the previous sentence, you just gave the idea of "positive implications" and in the next breath, you contradicted the idea. That erodes you coherence and cohesion.) is that allowing court trials to be broadcast on TV may lead to injustice. This is due to the fact that (verbose, wordy) When citizens watch court trials on TV, they may form opinions and criticisms based on mass media bias (I don't understand this point. They are just watching the judge make rulings and the attorneys present evidence and arguments. Where does the mass media bias come from? Aren't they seeing the justice system in reality?) and a lack of understanding of the legal system. Consequently, public and media pressure would inevitably arise, which might affect the verdict of judges or members of the jury, (Jury members are instructed by the judge not to read anything or discuss anything about the case outside of the courtroom, so I do not understand your point. A jury member that does not obey the judge's instructions can be replaced. There are alternate jurors sitting in. If a judge gives a verdict that is out of line, the case will be appealed by the defendant and a mistrial declared. ) meaning that justice would not be served. However, this issue could be solved if the public is informed with precise details of shown cases; (Actually these details are all presented and rebutted in the courtroom. The viewers see the defendant's lawyers present his side of the story, and the prosecutors present the state's side. It is up to the jury to decide what to believe. ) therefore they would be more able to form fair judgements. Thus, I believe this problem is insignificant. (Your point is not very appropriate. There are other very serious disadvantages.)


Nevertheless, I am of the opinion that (verbose. Do not put your opinions in the body paragraphs. They are for your arguments and supporting points.) televising legal proceedings can offer greater benefits, two of which are a deterrent to potential criminals and the knowledge to prevent similar crimes. Regarding the former, (The words former and latter are destructive to the reader's experience of a smoothly flowing text. Avoid them.) If people intending to commit offenses watch trials on such crimes, they may fear punishments and penalties. As a result, they would abandon their plans the offense or become law-abiding citizens at least in a short period. Coupled with this is that when citizens have the ability to watch trials in the courts shown on TV, they would possibly know how to avoid similar danger. This is because details in testimonies of offenders and stories from plaintiffs can give viewers valuable lessons in order to not become victims.


In conclusion, despite the fact that publishing broadcasting trials through TV channels may negatively affect the effectiveness of a jury system, deterring potential offenders and informing helpful knowledge (wrong collocation. Inform knowledge is quite unnatural.) to avoid crimes are undeniable advantages this trend (wrong word. There is no trend mentioned in the subject.) can offer. As such, I take the view that this practice, on the whole, is far more advantageous.

air train 506Topic: In some countries, some criminal trials in the court

This is wordy. Native English speakers normally just say in court so, you need to delete the. Despite that, you only really need to write some criminal trials because it goes without saying that they will be held in court.

air train 506The most obvious disadvantage is that allowing court trials

Once more it goes without saying that they will be held in court so, you need to delete the word court.

air train 506that publishing trials through TV channels

Native speakers talk of things being shown on TV so, replace the yellow part.


The red part does not add any extra information because it goes without saying that at least one television channel would be involved. This means that you need to delete it.