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Dear ABC,
How are you? Hopes the things are well there.
The reason to write this mail is to inform you that currently I am working in XYZ organization at Powai & we have a opening for the post of " Electrical Engineer" in our organization ( Project & Maintenance Dept.).
‘XYZ' is a multinational organization having offices in all Metro cities all over India. It dealts in Rating & Advisory Business. ‘XYZ' is a fast growing organization & had a very good future. It has a very good reputation in Market.
Following are the key benefits if you join the organization.
• Huge scope for the personal Growth: - The corporate office (where the opening is ) constructed with High tech Technologies & " state of the Art facilities. There is a huge scope to improve your knowledge& to use your expertise, skill to prove yourself.
• Good pay scale : - The organization has very good pay scale which will help you to improve financially.

• Work Experience with ‘XYZ' :- Working Experience in ‘XYZ' will help you in future Role in another organization.
Considering above said key benefits a s well as your knowledge, past experience, I will strongly recommed you to join our organization.
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Nicherin It dealts in Rating & Advisory Business
I think it's better if you say that: "it deals with every problem in terms of Rating and adivsory business".
NicherinXYZ' is a fast growing organization & had a very good future
... fast-developing organization and has good prospect.
NicherinFollowing are the key benefits if you join the organization.
add List following....
"your expertise, skill"->your expertise and skills.""
Nicherinle which will help you to improve financially.
...improve your financial problems.
I think I changed your words and style too much, i don't mean anything. It's just my opinion.
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if you have changed my words and style thats absolutely fine.. That was the purpose of posting it on the site, to get a few opinions on the correctness of this text. Can you point out a few grammar errors or is it grammatically sound?