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Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, work, or travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Traditionally, high school seniors will either pursue college or enter the workforce after their graduation. However, these days, as the third option-gap year, where students defer university enrollment to travel or work, is gaining traction. However, there are both pros and cons to have a year-long break. In this essay, I will discuss the advantages and the disadvantages of this growing development and offer my opinion.

On the one hand, delaying tertiary education for one year is advantageous to a certain extent. Firstly, gap year provide new graduates with an opportunity to broaden their horizon and gain valuable experience. It is clear that, when living abroad, students will have to adapt to their independent life and pick up new foreign languages. As a result, they have a chance to enrich their life experiences and hone practical skills. Secondly, delay tertiary education for one year looking for job opportunities or attending vocational training courses will empower students to identify a suitable career path. Such valuable experience would be hard for graduates to attain as they are occupied with their intense study schedules.

On the other hand, I am convinced that taking a gap year has a number of disadvantages. One of the major drawbacks of having a year-long break is that gap-takers may fall behind in their study as facing peer pressure, which could possibly drain their self-confidence. In addition to this, high school seniors can lose momentum, finding it hard to resume their education after a long time distracted from formal schooling. Moreover, a gap year may be very costly as young people are unlikely to save money or cultivate relevant job skills. It goes without saying that taking a gap year is heavily expensed involved as students have to pay for their accommodation and mainly entry-level jobs are neither pay well nor teach them anything substantive.

In conclusion, although delaying tertiary education for one year may be costly and make graduates stay behind their friends in the study, it provides students a chance to acquire priceless experience and know a job that is the most suitable for them. After the final analysis, my own view is that the advantages of taking a gap year may outweigh its disadvantages

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Traditionally, high school seniors will either pursue college or enter the workforce after their graduation. However, these days, as the a third option - a gap year - where students defer university enrollment to travel or work, is gaining traction. However, there are both pros and cons to have a year-long break. In this essay, I will discuss the advantages and the disadvantages of this growing development and offer my opinion.

Never mention your essay. The examiner knows you are writing an essay. They know that you are writing an "advantages/disadvantages" essay. because that is in the instructions. Do not repeat the instructions for the examiner to read. It is very poor form. Instead, write a thesis statement.

A thesis statement answers the essay prompt. It tells the examiner the main point of your essay. Here is an example thesis statement.

Although the young person can lose focus on their education goals during a long break, I believe that the opportunity to mature, discover one's life goals and meet new people far outweigh any negative consequences.


You have to present the arguments against your position first. You should switch your body paragraphs, putting the disadvantages first, and then the advantages. It will make a much more logical essay with better transitions.


On the one hand, delaying tertiary education for one year is advantageous to a certain extent. Firstly, First, a gap year provide new high school graduates with an opportunity to broaden their horizons and gain valuable experience. It is clear that, when living abroad, students (Since they have finished high school and are not yet accepted into university, they are not actually students.) these young people will have to adapt to their independent life and pick up new foreign languages. As a result, they have a chance to enrich their life experiences and hone practical skills. Secondly, Second, taking some time tertiary education for one year (repetitive) looking for job opportunities or attending vocational training courses will empower students them to identify a suitable career path. Such valuable experience would be hard for graduates them to attain as if they are occupied with their intense study schedules.

On the other hand, I am convinced that (Do not express your opinion in the body paragraphs. Just present your argument points. Besides, you have contradicted your conclusion, and that will cost you many points..) taking a gap year has a number of disadvantages. One of them major drawbacks of having a year-long break (You repeat a lot. Learn to use pronouns.) is that gap-takers may fall behind in their study as facing peer pressure, (That makes no sense. You did not express your idea well. ) which could possibly drain their self-confidence. In addition to this, high school seniors they can lose momentum, finding it hard to resume their education after a long time being away distracted from formal schooling. Moreover, a gap year it may be very costly as young people are unlikely to save money because the only jobs they qualify for pay very low wages. or cultivate relevant job skills. It goes without saying that taking a gap year is heavily expensed involved (unnatural) expensive as students have to pay for their accommodation and mainly entry-level jobs are neither pay well nor teach them anything substantive.

In conclusion, although delaying tertiary education for one year may be costly and make young people be entering university a year graduates stay behind their friends in the study, it provides them students a chance to acquire priceless experience and know what career path job that is the most suitable for them. After the final analysis, my own view is that So, therefore the advantages of taking a gap year certainly may outweigh its disadvantages (missing punctuation).

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minhductrinhSome students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, work, or travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

I read this task and it makes no sense. It is poor English. A gap year between high school and travel is not logical. I think you copied it incorrectly. Be sure to copy the instructions accurately.

Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university to work or travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Here are some other well-written versions of this task:

1. In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.
2. In some countries, it is usual for young people who graduate from high school to spend a year working or travelling before going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this? 

Give reasons and examples from your knowledge or experience to support your answer.
3. In some countries, some high school leavers are choosing to work or travel for a period of time before going to university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of those school leavers’ decision. Give your own opinion.

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