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Nowadays more people are choosing to live with their friends or alone rather than with their families, this trend is likely to have a negative impact on community. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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It’s believed that the trend that people tend to live with their friends or live on by themselves instead of living together with their family may affect the society negatively. Personally, I think agree with this statemet beacause of many reasons.

On the one hand, I think we still can gain benefits from living with friends or alone. We have to seperate from our families to learn how to live on our own, be self-reliant. In fact, if we live alone we can learn to cook, to wash things which we don’t need to do when we live at parents’ home.

On the other hand, not living with family is negative with people who depend on their parents too much. For instance, these people are often “mother’s darlings”. So, when they choose to live with friends or alone, they still lack of some skills and have to rely on others. That affect the community badly. Additionally, some people have bad sides inside them so that they always want to go far away from their family to make crimes. Because parents always keep eyes on them, they can’t do what they want. Moreover, if we live outside not parents’ house, it mean we have to buy another house, flat or department. That is a waste of money and it is also contribute in the problem of lacking of accomodation in some big cities.

In closing, everything has its two sides like a coin, and so living with friends or living alone. According to me, I ensure that the drawbacks of separating from family is outweigh the perks.

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It’s (Do not use contractions in formal essays.) believed that the trend that people tend (Trend and tend don't work together.) trend for people to live with their friends or live on by themselves instead of living together with their family may affect the society negatively. Personally, I think agree (You cannot put two verbs together like this.) with this statemet beacause of many reasons.


You did not answer the essay question: To what extent do you agree or disagree?

To answer, you need an adverb of extent. Some choices are totally, completely, fully, wholeheartedly, partially, partly, somewhat, with reservations, not at all, a little bit.

An argumentative essay has the following structure:

1. Opening with thesis statement.

2-4. Points of your argument. Reasons you support your statement.

5. Conclusion

It is not good to write "For many reasons / for the following reasons" because the reader expects that the next paragraphs will present your reasons.

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On the one hand, I think we still can gain benefits from living with friends or alone. We have to seperate from our families to learn how to live on our own and be self-reliant. In fact, if we live alone we can learn to cook, to wash (You use commas incorrectly. When you have a series, you must have a conjunction.) things which we don’t need to do when we live at our parents’ home.

On the other hand, not living with family is a problem for negative with people who depend on their parents too much. For instance, these people are often “mother’s darlings”. So, when they choose to live with friends or alone, they still lack of some skills and have to rely on others. That affect (wrong verb form subject/verb mismatch) the community badly. Additionally, some people are criminals have bad sides inside them so that they always want to go far away from their family to commit make crimes. Because parents always keep eyes on them, they can’t do what they want. Moreover, if we live outside not parents’ house, it mean we have to buy another house, flat or department. (wrong word) That is a waste of money and it is also contribute (wrong verb form ) in the problem of lacking of accomodation in some big cities. (... the lack of housing...)

In closing, everything has its two sides like a coin, (Informal. Do not use aphorisms like this one in formal essays. Most learners use them inappropriately.) and so living with friends or living alone. According to me, I ensure (wrong word) that the drawbacks of separating from family is outweigh (wrong verb form ) the perks. (wrong word)

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