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This is writing IELTS test 2

Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do you agree or disagree?

Answer

Many people think that vegetarian is healthier for those who prefer eating vegetables rather than meat. While I agree with this view, I believe that people should have meat in every their meals in order to have a good health.

On the one hand, There are several reasons why vegetarian benefits for human body. Firstly, scientists have proven that vegetarians have a lower risk of illnesses such as heart disease, diabetes, obesity and some forms of cancers.These foods are low in the amount of the unsaturated fats and are therefore, very healthy to eat. Secondly, vegetables and fruits contain vitamins that are highly recommended for people. For example, raw spinach probably provides a source of vitamins such as vitamin A, E as well as by far calciums. Health benefits are not the only reason to follow a vegetarian diet. When we obtain our food from plants, we can also stop cruelty to animals.

On the other hand, vegetarians are likely to face some difficulties if they do not eat meat. One of the difficulties is that individuals have to pay attention to choose the correct balance of vegetarian food not meet energy needs. If they are in a wrong way of choosing types of vegetables, this may lead to a malnutrition. Furthermore, athletes are the people who should not be vegetarian. Since their job involves intense training on a regular basis, they need to consume meat such as beef or pork which provides them with enough calories.


In conclusion, while I agree that becoming vegetarian can help people have a healthy diet, I do not think it is an option that everybody should take.

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Many people think that vegetarian is (Poor English.) healthier for those who prefer eating vegetables (The topic is about all people, not just those who prefer vegetables.) rather than meat. While I agree with this view, I believe that people should have meat in every their meals (Poor English.) in order to have a good health.

On the one hand, There (Incorrect capitalization) are several reasons why being a vegetarian benefits the for human body. Firstly, First, scientists have proven that vegetarians have a lower risk of illnesses such as heart disease, diabetes, obesity and some forms of cancers.These foods are low in the amount of the unsaturated saturated fats and are therefore, very healthy to eat. Secondly, Second, vegetables and fruits contain vitamins that are highly recommended for people. (That text is copied, except for a one-word synonym substitution, from the internet. The examiner will ignore it in assessing your score.) For example, raw spinach probably provides a source of vitamins such as vitamin A, E as well as calcium. by far calciums. Health benefits are not the only reason to follow a vegetarian diet. When we obtain our food from plants, we can also stop cruelty to animals. (That text is copied from the internet. The examiner will ignore it in assessing your score.)

On the other hand, vegetarians are likely to face some difficulties if they do not eat meat. One of the difficulties is that individuals have to pay attention to choose the correct balance of vegetarian food not meet energy needs. (Ungrammatical) If they are in a wrong way of choosing (ungrammatical) types of vegetables, this may lead to a malnutrition. Furthermore, athletes are the people who should not be vegetarian. Since their job involves intense training on a regular basis, they need to consume meat such as beef or pork which provides them with enough calories. (That text is copied from the internet. The examiner will ignore it in assessing your score.)

In conclusion, while I agree that becoming vegetarian can help people have a healthy diet, I do not think it is an option that everybody should take. (That text is copied from the internet. The examiner will ignore it in assessing your score.)


When the copied text is removed, your essay has only 175 words. The minimum is 250.
So you will probably get a zero band score for this essay. Examiners are extremely adept at detecting text that you have memorized or copied from a book or other people's essays.

It is a waste of my time to correct sentences that are not your own. It does not benefit you either. Do not copy other people's writing.

Since your English skills need a lot of work, I suggest that you post single sentences in the "Grammar and Sentence Structure" forum and get feedback on them. You are not prepared enough for the IELTS exam.

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