This is a Description essay? I had rewrite this a couple of time but i still struggle in verb tense and grammar. So can guys please help me out?

One Night as Changed Our Life

When my childhood I had experienced a tragic life. On night that had changed my family and people life on the village. We live in the camp in the Palawan of the because we are refugee there. That big accident I will never forget in my life. I remember all the details in the accident happen. On that time I was 7 year old. I had see the big fired in my life I ever seen before. That fired made a lot people suffered. People lost their house and important things in their life were gone as well. It also made our family life up and down. Even though it been fourteen year but I still remember the entire thing in that night. I think that horrible accident will never fade away in my mind.

The accident happens on June 13, 1994 in the . That time I and my family were in the room and ready to go to bed. Suddenly I hear some voice from outside are screaming and said “Fire”. After I hear that I told to my mom. Mom did you hear something? She said she didn’t hear anything anything, so we try to silence and listen it. When we heard the voice toward us, we did mind at all. We though they just making up for fun. But suddenly we hear the voice louder and louder from outside. So we decided to check it out.

When I was outside, I see the big fire in the sky. I see people carry their stuff and moving around. My mom was frightened and told to her children “just stay here where you are and don’t go anywhere”. After she that she go back to the house to pack our stuffs. My brother was hugged his siblings because he was so scared that we are lost. On that moment I can felt how he so protected to his three siblings. I felt glad that I have a responsible brother like him. My mom was only one are packing out stuff because on that time my dad was in another city. It took like two to three hours to get there by plane. We were so scared because the fire getting to close to our house but my mom did out yet.

When my mom gone packing everything we all five people carry the stuff and run, but we didn’t know where to run to. In our village is near to the airport, so we run toward there. When we reached there we hugging each other and star to cry. I see lots people are screaming for help because they didn’t carry all the important things in their. Some people have nothing in their hand. They lost everything and all the money they had been saving for many years. After couple hours of fired, the firemen came. On that moment I was mad at them because they didn’t come when the fire started; how come they just came after the fire was stop?

We were lucky found the place to rest at night. My brother was smart he found the big room for us, while people were crying and stared at the fire. My brother goes to search the place. We sleep at the class room. After that accident all the class room people started to make the house to live. So that mean no school to young people goes to. The next morning I and my family go back to the place. All the thing had turn to ash. I saw some people are crying because all things had gone in one. We don’t know who to blame of this accident. All I know that we all save and no one are hurt from his accident. I’m glad that my family are save and survival this hardship. I know this horrible happen will never go away when I growing up.

babyblue_girl08This is a Description essay.? I had to rewrite this a couple of times but i still struggle in with verb tense and grammar. So can you guys please help me out?
One Night as that Changed Our LifeLives

When I was in my childhood, I had experienced a tragic life. One night that had changed my family's and people's life lives on in the village. We lived in the camp in the Palawan of the Philippines because we are were refugees there. That big accident I will never forget that big accident in my life. I remember all the details in of the accident happen. On At that time I was 7 years old. I had see saw the biggest fired that I had in my life I ever seen before in my life. That fired made a lot people suffered. People lost their houses, and important things in their lives were gone as well. It also made our family's life go up and down. Even though it been (has been or was) fourteen years ago, but I still remember the entire thing in that night (or everything that happened that night). I think that that horrible accident will never fade away in my mind.(you need one "that" to introduce the clause, and a second to modify "accident")

The accident happeneds on June 13, 1994 in the Philippines. At that time I and my family ("my family and I" is better) were in the room and ready to go to bed. Suddenly I heard some voices (either "a voice" or "some voices") from outside are screaming and said “Fire”. After I heard that I told to my mom, "Mom did you hear something?" She said she didn’t hear anything anything, so we triedy to be silentce and listen it. When we heard the voices coming toward us, we did mind ("didn't think anything of it", or "didn't pay any attention") at all. We thought they were just making up for fun. But suddenly we heard the voices yelling louder and louder from outside. So we decided to check it out.

When I was went outside, I see saw the big fire in the sky. I see saw people carrying their stuff and moving around. My mom was frightened and told to her children “just stay here where you are and don’t go anywhere”. After she said that, she go went back into the house to pack our stuffs. My brother was hugged his siblings because he was so scared that we are were lost (or "that we would all die"). OnAt that moment I can felt how that he so protected (or "would protect") to his three siblings. I felt glad that I have had a responsible brother like him. My mom was the only one are packing our stuff because on at that time my dad was in another city. It took like two to three hours to get there by plane. We were so scared because the fire was getting to close to our house but my mom did had not come out yet.
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Thank you so much for correction my essay. I really appreciated it. Here I edited my rest of essay but I'm sure there were a lot mistake. Can check it where i got mistake? Anyway thanks so much for correction my essay.

When my mom done packed everything, we five people carrying the stuff and ran, but we didn’t know where to run to. In our village is near to the airport, so we run toward there. When we reached there we hugged each other and started to cried. I saw lots people were screaming for help because they didn’t carry any things important in their. Some people have nothing in their hand. They lost everything and all the money they had been saving for many years. After couple hours of fire, the firemen came. At that moment I was mad at them because they didn’t came when the fire started; how come they just came after the fire was stop?

We were lucky found the place to rest at night. My brother was smart he found the big room for us, while other people were there and crying and stared at the fire. My brother went to search the place to us. We sleep at the school class room. After that accident all the class room people started to make the house to lives. So that mean no school to young people goes to. The next morning my family and I go back to the place. The entire thing there had turned to ash. I saw some people were crying because all things had gone in one. We didn’t know who to blame of this accident. All I know that we all are saved and no one are hurt from his accident. I’m glad that my family are save and survival this hardship. I know this horrible happen will never go away when I’ am growing up.
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Please look at the corrections and study where you are making the most frequent mistakes. Then you can learn not to make the same mistakes again.

Think about each entence that you write. Think about the tense - is it present, past, or future? Did you use the correct verb form for the tense? Does the subject agree with the verb?
If you mean more than one thing or person, did you use the plural from (with an -s on the end)? Is an article (a, the) missing?
It does not help you if someone corrects your mistakes, and you just copy the corrections without thinking about them.
babyblue_girl08Thank you so much for correctingion my essay. I really appreciated it. Here I edited my the rest of my essay but I'm sure there were a lot of mistakes. Can you check it where i got have made mistakes? Anyway thanks so much for correctingion my essay.

When my mom was done packinged everything, we five people carriedying the stuff and ran, but we didn’t know where to run to. In oOur village (village is subject of "is", don't use it as the object of the preposition "in") is near to the airport, so we run ran toward it there. When we reached it there we hugged each other and started to cried. I saw lots of people who were screaming for help because they didn’t carry any things (?anything) important in their (? missing object of the preposition "in"). Some people have had (past tense)nothing in their hands. They lost everything and all the money they had been saving for many years. After the fire had burned for a couple of hours of fire, the firemen came. At that moment I was mad at them because they didn’t came come (the past tense is "did come") when the fire started; how come they just came (better to say "why did they come only") after the fire was outstop?

We were lucky to find a found the place to rest at night. My brother was smart. He found the a big room for us, while other people were just standing there and crying and staringed at the fire. My brother went to search for a the place for to us. We sleep slept at the school class room. After that accident. all the class room (? do you mean "people who were in the class room") people started to make build new the houses to live in. So that meant that there was no school for to young people to go goes to. The next morning my family and I go went back to the place where our house used to be.. The entire thing there had turned to ash. I saw some people were crying because all their things had gone in one night. We didn’t know who to blame for of this accident. All I knew was that we all are saved were safe and no one arewas hurt from his in this accident. I’m glad that my family are save was safe and survivedal this hardship. I know the memory of this horrible event happen will never go away, not even when I’ am growning up.
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