The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished(renovate and redecorate (something, especially a building)). The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.


The table illustrates how many tourists visit Ashdown Museum between the year before and after its renovation while the pie charts compare the outcomes of interviews about the proportions of different extents of tourist’s satisfaction at the same periods.

It is clear that in the table, the number of visitors substantially went up after the refurbishment of the museum while in the pie charts, there was a significant rise in the proportion of people’s satisfaction.

During the year before the museum was closed to be redesigned, the total number of visitors was only 74.000 people the year after the refurbishment saw a dramatic increase in the figures for tourists which was over 90,000 people.


The year after the museum was renovated, the percentage of participants who felt content and very content both rose considerably compared to the year after the event, to more than 10%. As a result, the ratio of people voting for the dissatisfied and very dissatisfied feeling fell remarkably from 40% to 15% and from 10% to 5% respectively.

The table illustrates (poor word choice. Read my advice.) how many tourists visit Ashdown Museum between the year before and after its renovation (wrong expression) while the pie charts (how many?) compare the outcomes of interviews about the proportions of different extents (Poor English. Unnatural) of tourist’s satisfaction at the same periods.

It is clear that in the table, (Unnecessary. Delete) the number of visitors substantially went up after the refurbishment of the museum while in the pie charts, there was a significant rise in the proportion of people’s satisfaction. (You are trying to cram too many ideas into one sentence. The firs paragraph should describe each type of graphic separately, and give more descriptive information. )

During the year before the museum was closed to be redesigned, (not a good word choice) the total number of visitors was only 74.000 people the year (Now you mashed two sentences together in an ungrammatical way.) after the refurbishment saw (wrong word choice. Read my advice.) a dramatic increase in the figures (wrong word choice. Read my advice.) for tourists which was over 90,000 people.


The year after the museum was renovated, the percentage of participants (poor word choice. ) who felt content (There is no choice called "content" on the survey.) and very content both rose considerably compared to the year after the event, to more than 10%. (That does not make sense) As a result, the ratio (incorrect word. Ratios are expressed in two numbers, A and B, with a colon between them. For example 7:1. You can combine categories to show ratios, but you cannot just copy the numbers and call them "ratios." ) of people voting for the dissatisfied and very dissatisfied feeling fell remarkably from 40% to 15% and from 10% to 5% respectively.


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