Some people think movies should only be for entertainment. Others think that they should also have educational values. Discuss both views and give your opinion.


People have different views about the goal of films. Although in some ways, it may seem reasonable to believe the aim of movies is for entertainment only, I personally believe that the educational values are equally important as well.


On the one hand, there are various reasons why I argue that movies should be created just for entertainment. Firstly, the fact that after a hard-working day in school or office, many people tend to come home and relieve stress by watching television with their family. Therefore, films are part and parcel of entertaining individuals. In other words, films would not complete their role if it does not provide the entertainment factor. Secondly, films and movies are a part of the entertainment industry, whose purpose is for entertaining people. This industry has created a thousand jobs and a vast amount of money in many countries.


On the other hand, I also agree that films and television programs should include educational values in their content. The main reason is that while watching films, people are likely to gain knowledge easier. To be more specific, while being concentrated on the movie's plot, people's minds are often empty, which means that knowledge at this time would be easier for individuals to obtain. Hence, this is crucial for learning new things. For example, Blood Moon Party movies teach watchers moral lessons of friendship while people enjoying the whole movie. These lessons might be remembered better and retain longer in comparison with physic moral courses.


In conclusion, I believe that films and movies' plot should comprise both entertaining and educational values for the purpose of people who will watch.



p/s: tks for reading, I finished in around 45 min and I'm aiming to reach the 6.0 IELTS writing score, does this essay enough?

[ 1] Films are a popular pastime in many, if not most, cultures. [ 2] The movie industry is massive in many parts of the world such as the US (Hollywood), India (Bollywood) and practically every other region. [ 3] However, people have different views about what the goal of films should be. Although in some ways, it may seem reasonable to some believe they aim of movies is should be for entertainment only, I personally believe that the films should also promote educational values are equally important as well.

On the one hand, there are various reasons why some may argue that movies should be created made just for entertainment. Firstly, the fact that after a hard-working long day in school or the office, many people tend to come home and relieve stress by watching television a movie with their family. Therefore, films are part and parcel of entertaining individuals. In other words, films would not complete fulfill their role if it does they did not provide the entertainment people expect. factor. Secondly, films and movies are a part of the entertainment industry, whose purpose is for entertaining people. This industry has created a thousand jobs and a vast amount of money in many countries. [ 4]

On the other hand, I also agree that films and television programs [ 5] should include educational values in their content. The main reason is that while watching films, people are likely to gain knowledge easier. be influenced by what they watch. To be more specific, while being concentrated on the movie's plot, people's minds are often empty, which means that knowledge at this time would be easier for individuals to obtain. Hence, this is a crucial opportunity for learning new things. For example, the movie Blood Moon Party movies teaches watchers moral lessons of friendship while also providing some entertainment. people enjoying the whole movie. These lessons might be remembered better and retained longer than if they were taught in comparison with physic moral some course.

In conclusion, I believe that films and movies' movie plots should comprise be both entertaining [ 6] to help people relax and educational to [ 6] teach important moral values. for the purpose of people who will watch.

p/s: tks Thanks for reading my text. I finished it in around 45 minutes, and I'm aiming to reach the score 6.0 in IELTS writing. score, does Is this essay good enough?

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[ 1]: Write a general sentence at the start of the introduction to tell the reader what the general topic is. Take a look at my replies in the following threads to learn about essay structure:

https://www.englishforums.com/English/EssayAgreeDisagreeYoungEnjoyLife-Older/bjnlwx/post.htm

https://www.englishforums.com/English/CanAnyoneCheckEssay/bwpzmg/post.htm

[ 2]: The second part of the introduction should provide some background.

[ 3]: Signal the issue to the reader.

[ 4]: This second point is vague and does not appear relevant here. Think of another one.

[ 5]: TV programs are outside the scope of this essay.

[ 6]: In the conclusion, try to summarize the main points/findings from your body paragraphs.

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Fix the above essay (especially the second point in your second body paragraph), and post the new version below. You’re not far off a 6.0 score.

Vic001People have different views about the goal of films.

That is not a good opening sentence. This video is a good lesson on the first paragraph.

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Here is an example opening paragraph:

TOPIC: Some people think movies should only be for entertainment. Others think that they should also have educational values. Discuss both views and give your opinion.


Filmmaking is a for-profit business, so the managers of studios that make movies are deeply concerned about their popularity; they must have a great entertainment value to be competitive. But others realize that movies are valuable tools for educating the public and should also be accurate and communicate facts about history, culture or science. Personally, I do not believe there is any conflict between these goals. Great blockbuster movies can also be educational.

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First of all. Thank you for fixing my essay, this is the new version, I make some change to the second point in the second paragraph, introduction and conclusion as well. Please have a look.

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The habit of watching films and movies are becoming increasingly popular among people in different countries. People have different views with regard to the question of what values do films should be contained. Although some people argue that movies should be for entertainment only, I personally believe that they should also promote educational values as well.

On the one hand, there are various reasons why some may argue that movies should be made just for entertainment. Firstly, after a hard-working day in school or the office, many people tend to come home and relieve stress by watching a movie with their family. Therefore, films are part and parcel of entertaining individuals. In other words, films would not fulfill their role if they do not provide the entertainment that people expect. Secondly, from an economic perspective, films and movies are a part of the entertainment industry that has created a thousand jobs and a vast amount of money in many countries. This also means that the entertainment factor of films and movies bring a wide range of benefits to society’s economy.

On the other hand, I also agree that films should include educational values in their content. The main reason is that while watching films, people are likely to gain knowledge easier. To be more specific, while being concentrated on the movie's plot, people's minds are often empty, which means that knowledge at this time would be easier for individuals to obtain. Hence, this is a crucial opportunity for people to learning new things. For example, The movie Blood Moon Party teaches watchers moral lessons of friendship while also providing some entertainment. These lessons might be remembered better and retained longer than if they were taught in some courses.

In conclusion, I believe that movies' plots should be both entertaining to reduce people’s stress, boost the countries’ economy, and educational to teach important moral values.


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1> I think the introduction of Mr.Simon and Mrs.Liz is quite suitable for me to learn. Do you know these teachers? And if the way of writing an introduction of them is right?

2> The final sentence of the third paragraph. Why the phrase "in comparison with" is wrong?

3> the first sentence of the conclusion. Why I can not use the word "comprise" instead of "be"


Again, thank you so much. I learned many things from reading your response.

Vic001

First of all. Thank you for fixing my essay. This is the new version. I make have made some changes to the second point in the second body paragraph, introduction and conclusion as well. Please have a look.

I’m sorry, but I don’t have time to keep correcting new versions. However for that second point, you can write:

Secondly, movies made purely for entertainment attract large numbers of viewers and are often blockbusters that generate an enormous amount of income. This creates jobs and contributes to economic growth.

Vic001

1> I think the introduction of Mr. Simon and Mrs. Liz is quite suitable for me to learn. Do you know these teachers? And if is their way of writing an introduction correct? of them is right?

I don’t know them and don’t wish to know them! It’s entirely up to you which structure to follow.

Vic001

2> In the final sentence of the third paragraph, why is the phrase "in comparison with" is wrong?

It’s not just that phrase, but the whole sentence is flawed.

Vic001

3> In the first sentence of the conclusion, why can’t I can not use the word "comprise"? instead of "be"

That’s not how “comprise” is used. Look it up in the dictionary.