Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

In the modern life, people usually address to earning money than learning knowledge. Therefore, some young people want to find a job before entering in a school or university. Whereas many people believe students should go to school or university first. However, in my opinion, drawbacks and benefits of a situation depend on the decision people make.

Working in a specific job makes young people know exactly what they want to do for their future. It is because high schools also held some career orientation sessions to help students envision occupations in the real world. But they have no experience to envisage their own life. In the western countries, the school board invariably held career orientation sessions for students to teach about the job will be and the employee characteristics they need. However, student are too young to know what the future job really want to do.

On the other hand, young people are too immature to work in a working environment and find out solutions to deal with troubles they face for. This means colleague relationships, stress, working with superior are some problems which employees constantly face while young people just communicate with their peers and family. For example, my younger brother decided to find a job without entering a university. However, with the high school graduate certificate, he merely does a part time job with a small salary. After working few months, he has some problems with co-worker, but he has no solution to deal with it.

All in all, I think that young people should spend a year enjoying the life, participate in some activities that they’ve never been to do or working a job that improve their skills. However, they should not focus too much on that, but enjoy the study environment in a university. Because it helps them learn and know many things that life does not have.


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In the modern life, (It is almost never good to write phrases like this. Present tense verbs describe the time frame.) people usually address (wrong word) to earning money than learning knowledge. (wrong word. Knowledge is everything that a person knows. We accumulate knowledge by having experiences and learning facts or information. ) Therefore, some young people want to find a job before entering (wrong word) in a school or university. Whereas many people believe students should go to school or university first. (wrong grammar. This is a fragment, not a sentence) However, in my opinion, drawbacks and benefits of a situation depend on the decision people make.

(That is not a good answer to the essay prompt. The prompt asks about a specific circumstance. When a young person goes to work after high school, and chooses not to go to university, what are the consequences? What are the benefits they get? What are the issues they face?

You completely failed to understand the topic and the points that you make in the body paragraphs are not focused on the actual topic. )

Working in a specific job makes young people know exactly what they want to do for their future. It is because high schools also held (wrong tense) some career orientation sessions to help students envision occupations in the real world. But they have no experience to envisage their own life. In the western countries, the school board invariably held career orientation sessions for students to teach about the job will be and the employee characteristics they need. However, student (wrong form) are too young to know what the future job really want to do. (wrong grammar) (This entire paragraph is off-topic. The essay is not about career orientations or preparations in high school. You will get a very bad score for "task completion." )

On the other hand, young people are too immature to work in a working environment and find out (wrong usage ) solutions to deal with troubles they face for. (wrong expression. Poor English.) This means colleague relationships, stress, working with superior (wrong form) are some problems which employees constantly face while young people just communicate with their peers and family. For example, my younger brother decided to find a job without entering a and not apply to a university. However, with the high school graduate certificate, he merely does a part time job with a small salary. After working few months, he has some problems with a co-worker, but he has no means solution to deal with it.

All in all, I think that young people should spend a year enjoying the life, (That is not an answer to the question. It is not "what is your opinion about going to university or working?) participate in some activities that they’ve (wrong - Do not use contractions in formal essays) never been to do or working a job that improve (wrong form) their skills. However, they should not focus too much on that, but enjoy the study environment in a university. Because it helps them learn and know many things that life does not have. (Fragment, not a sentence)

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