In recent years, public information of a variety of fields in science or business arouses the argument whether publishing academic information is advantageous or some essential data should be kept in private. From my point of view, the tendency brings out both merits and demerits that need to be discussed in terms of different aspects.

On the one hand, it is indisputable that sharing theoretical knowledge widely can give talented people a chance to access the necessary resources that may assist their projects. There are a lot of scientists who can innovate and be creative, but they can not reach their final result without having a deeper insight into their field. Hence, public academic information seems to be an indispensable tool for them to break the barrier and establish innovation for society. For example, in the past, Albert Einstein couldn’t finish his theory of relativity unless he read all the documents of Thomas Edison and developed his theories based on what he had discovered.

On the other hand, the information of academic fields should not be shared freely due to its devastation and uncontrollably consequences if it is used in the wrong ways. It is deniable that these documents would be a step forward to social development, but somehow it can exacerbate the social safety by people who exploit it for other purposes, such as oppression, spreading new illegal drugs, or even the new pandemic for the areas. For instance, last year an act of terror occurred because some criminals were able to learn how to make explosives using free information on the internet. These circumstances are not permitted and emphasized that information needs to be distinguished, and not to be accessed by everyone.

In conclusion, distributing information free of charge can help in certain aspects but can also be detrimental to society. Although some believe people should give as much knowledge pros and cons as possible, I strongly believe the opposite due to its conceal dangers that may risk people who underestimate the value of information.

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In recent years, public information of a variety of fields in science or business arouses the argument (There is no argument or "heated debate". The topic is only asking for your opinion on one side of a topic. Write a background sentence that convinces the examiner that you have understood the topic.) whether publishing academic information is advantageous or some essential data should be kept in private. From my point of view, the tendency brings out both merits and demerits (wrong word) that need to be discussed (Poor style) in terms of different aspects. (awkward, unnatural)

That last sentence is not good for an essay opening. .

The examiner knows you are writing an essay. They know that you are going to discuss the topic. Do not tell them what they already know.

Write a thesis statement so the examiner knows the main point of your essay.

In this example, the first sentence describes competitive information that universities and businesses create. The second sentence describes both viewpoints regarding sharing this information. The third sentence answers the prompt "give your own opinion." That is your thesis statement.

#1: Universities, governments and businesses conduct studies and research which creates new ideas, data, or useful information that can lead to new inventions, products or technology.

#2: Some people believe that it best for society if all this information is shared, but others have the view that it belongs exclusively to the organization that spent the time, effort and money to create it.

#3: I firmly believe that information should be shared as much as possible, but some is too valuable or dangerous to be released to the public.


I have highlighted awkward or wrongly-used phrases;

On the one hand, it is indisputable that sharing theoretical knowledge widely can give talented people a chance to access the necessary resources that may assist their projects. There are a lot of scientists who can innovate and be creative, but they can not reach their final result without having a deeper insight into their field. Hence, public academic information seems to be an indispensable tool for them to break the barrier and establish innovation for society. For example, in the past, Albert Einstein couldn’t finish his theory of relativity unless he read all the documents of Thomas Edison (That is simply not true. ) and developed his theories based on what he had discovered.

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