Topic: The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019

The diagram reveals information about the outcome of the outline of the young people who use their smartphones for major reasons in particular Africa from 2016 to 2019. Overall, teenagers almost use their phone for social networking and followed by email. However, the digital camera was less accessed by the youngsters over the period.

On the one hand, in 2016, the social network was dominant, accounting for 50 percent, prior to decreasing by 2% and there was increasing slightly more than a half between 2018 and 2019. In contrast, the proportion of people who used their phones for digital cameras is almost 10 percent but later went up approximately 13%. Therefore, there was decreased slowly by about 2% and in 2019, the percentage of users hit a low of a tiny number.

On the other hand, email stand in the second with the young people use most with 25 percent and there was declined sizably with 19 percent over 3 years. Secondly, the phone calls were staying in the third with a fifth and there continuously increase fast from 15 to 20. Moreover, at the end of the period, there was overcame email which stood behind social media.

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Topic: The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019


The diagram reveals information about the outcome of the outline of the young people who use their smartphones for major reasons in particular Africa from 2016 to 2019. Overall, teenagers almost use their phone for social networking and followed by email. However, the digital camera was less accessed by the youngsters over the period.

On the one hand, in 2016, the social network was dominant, accounting for 50 percent, prior to decreasing by 2% and there was increasing slightly more than a half between 2018 and 2019. In contrast, the proportion of people who used their phones for digital cameras is almost 10 percent but later went up approximately 13%. Therefore, there was decreased slowly by about 2% and in 2019, the percentage of users hit a low of a tiny number.

On the other hand, email stand in the second with the young people use most with 25 percent and there was declined sizably with 19 percent over 3 years. Secondly, the phone calls were staying in the third with a fifth and there continuously increase fast from 15 to 20. Moreover, at the end of the period, there was overcame email which stood behind social media.

The length of your essay is good.

The vocabulary is quite poor and inappropriate. You have many grammatical errors and poor sentences.

You are using Task 2 vocabulary and essay structure. Task 1 is very very different. It is a math/science/ engineering task, so you must have a different vocabulary list than for the argumentative essay in Task 2.

It is much more important to use precise and exact words for Task 1. Using synonyms can backfire and hurt your score, since different dictionary words may have similar, but not exact meanings. Read my advice about vocabulary for Task 1.


The diagram (wrong word. Read my advice) reveals information (inappropriate expression) about the outcome of the outline (wrong word.) of the teenagers from a country in Africa young people who use their smartphones for major reasons (wrong words.) in particular Africa from 2016 to 2019. (This time expression is suitable for line graphs, not pie charts.) Overall, teenagers almost use their phone for social networking and followed by email. However, the digital camera was less accessed by the youngsters over the period. (Your paragraph is not very adequate for the task. Please read my advice and the sample essay.)

(Read my advice about paragraphs in Task 1. Do not combine the description of the graphic with the "main features". The topics are different, so write different paragraphs.)

Overall, teenagers almost (wrong usage. This means that the do not use their phone for social networking, but they are tempted to do that..) use their phone for social networking and followed by email. However, the digital camera was less accessed by the youngsters (wrong word.) over the period.

On the one hand, i (These transition phrases are NOT good for Task 1. You are not writing about opposing ideas. You are describing information) In 2016, using smartphones for the social networking was dominant, accounting for 50 percent, prior to decreasing by 2% in 2017. (Do not write lengthy sentences in Task 1. ) and there was increasing slightly more than a half between 2018 and 2019. (That is not clear.) In contrast, the proportion of people these teenagers who used their phones for digital photography cameras is was almost (Incorrect. "Almost 10%" is 9% The values on the charts are EXACT, not approximate.) 10 percent in 2016 but later went up the next year approximately (wrong) to 13%. Therefore, (Wrong transition word.) there was decreased (incorrect English) slowly by about 2% and in 2019, the percentage of users hit a low of a tiny number. (Very bad English)

On the other hand, email stand in the second (Very unnatural) with the young people use most (Ungrammatical. It is incorrect to write a main clause after a preposition. "With" is a preposition. :the young people use" is a main clause.) with 25 percent and there was declined (ungrammatical0 sizably with 19 percent over 3 years. Secondly, the phone calls were staying in the third with a fifth and there continuously increase fast from 15 to 20. (Very bad English) Moreover, at the end of the period, there was overcame email (Very bad English) which stood behind social media.

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Sample essay to study:

The pie charts show the results of four surveys of African teens in one country concerning the primary way they use their mobile phones. Surveys were done annually between 2016 and 2019, and participants could choose from these four categories: social networking, email, phone calls and taking photos.

Overall, about three-quarters mainly used their phones for either social networking or email. And the majority of participants selected social networking, except in 2017, when it was slightly less. Making phone calls was consistently the least chosen option.

In detail, taking photos became more popular over the period covered, gradually rising from 15%, or third place, in 2016 to 20%, second place, in 2019. Making phone calls had the reverse trend, declining from one in ten in 2016 to one in twenty in 2019, and it consistently was the least-chosen option. Exchanging emails also dropped marginally from a quarter to 19%. The most frequently picked category was social networking, ranging from a low of 48% in 2017 to its maximum of 56% in 2019.


Here is a second sample essay:

The four pie charts, labeled each year from 2016 through 2019, break down the primary usage of mobile phones as reported by teenagers in an African country. Each could pick one of four categories: social networking, email, phone calls and taking photos.

Overall, social networking was the most-used smart phone feature among these teenagers, being favored more than twice as much as the second place option, emailing. Digital photography and phone calls were chosen the least.

In detail, the proportion picking social networking was half or more in all four years, except for 2017, where it was 48%. In second place, emailing, the percentages ranged from a high of 25% in 2016, with slight decreases each year to end at 19% in 2019. The sum of the two categories, photography and phone calls, ranged from 25-29%; however, the increase in photography was offset by a decrease in phone calls. In the last year, four times more participants picked photography than those who selected phone calls, 20% versus 5%.