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Task 2: Many countries are expected to have a higher proportion of older people than the young. Is this positive or negative development?

It occurs to many countries nowadays that the older generations are expected and prioritised instead of the younger ones. This results in a debate whether this is a positive or negative improvement. While I believe that this woukd bring back a myriad of benefits to the applied countries, I hold a firm belief that this could leave impacts on the development of many countries.

On the one hand, the rise in the figure of old people is a solution to many problems of developing countries such as umemployment and low living quality. To begin with, as countries in the progress of developing such as Viet Nam, Thailand, and Philipines have a high unemployment rate. If there were more people of age than young people, the younger generations would be much more valued. As the result, more people would be amitted into desired careers. Furthermore, living quality could be improved with the increase in the number of aged people. Unless the rate of aged people rises, more hospitals, homes for the aged won’t be built. Hence, living quality of one country won’t be considered to have been improved.

On the other hand, there wouldn’t be much negative effects if the aged rate didn’t rocket. A large number of old people would affect national economy as a myriad of people need pension while not contributing their work to the country. This results in a holdup in economy, which prevents the development of one country. Thus, this problem can also lead to the lack of work force. Because of the decrease in the level of young generations, less people will be working for companies, which also leads to preventions in economical improvements. Besides, death rate is much higher when being compared to birth rate, as older people are more vulnerable to diseases such as flu and cancer.

From my point of view, I believe that due to economical holdups as well as high death rate resulted from the large quantity of the aged, I tend to gravitate towards the idea that it is the negative impacts are brought back by this problem instead of positive effects.

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It occurs (Wrong word. It occurs to me that I need to go shopping tomorrow. "It occurs to me" means "I think of this". Countries do not think..) to many countries nowadays that the older generations are expected and prioritised (Off topic. It is not about priorities.) instead of the younger ones. This results in a debate (The topic says nothing about a debate. It is only asking for your analysis.) . whether this is a positive or negative improvement.(wrong word. "improvement" is always positive.) While I believe that this woukd bring back a myriad (wrong word) of benefits to the applied (wrong word) countries, I hold a firm belief that this could leave impacts (You did not answer the topic - is it mainly positive or mainly negative?) on the development of many countries.

On the one hand, the rise in the figure (wrong word) of old people is a solution to many problems of developing countries such as umemployment and low living quality. (wrong expression - low quality of life.) To begin with, as developing countries in the progress of developing such as Viet Nam, Thailand, and The Philippines Philipines have a high unemployment rate. If there were more older people of age (wrong expression) than young people, the younger generations would be much more valued. As a the result, more people would be amitted into desired careers. Furthermore, living quality could be improved with the increase in the number of aged people. Unless the rate (wrong word) of aged people rises, more hospitals, homes for the aged (wrong grammar, missing conjunction) won’t be built. Hence, living quality of one country won’t be considered to have been improved.

On the other hand, there wouldn’t (Do not use contractions in formal essays.) be much (wrong word) negative effects if the aged rate (wrong word) didn’t rocket. (wrong word) A large number of old people would affect the national economy as a myriad of people they all need a pension while not contributing but they do not contribute to the output of their work to the country. This results in a holdup in economy, the economy being held back which prevents the development of one (wrong word) country. Thus, this problem can also lead to the lack of a labour work force. Because of the decrease in the level (wrong word) of young generations, less people will be working for companies, which also leads to preventions (wrong form) in economical improvements. Besides, the death rate is much higher when being compared to the birth rate, as older people are more vulnerable to diseases such as flu and cancer.

From my point of view, I believe that due to economical holdups as well as a high death rate resulted (wrong form) from the large number quantity of the aged, I tend to gravitate towards the idea that it is the negative impacts are (ungrammatical. Missing relative pronoun.) brought back by this situation problem instead of positive effects.

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