Nowadays, cell phones have become popular in daily life and in school life as well. Nevertheless, it is assumed that teachers should not allow students to use phones in class. In my viewpoint, I firmly concur with the statement for the following reasons.
First of all, phones should be prohibited in class because they distract students from studying. There are a lot of interesting applications, and websites on phones, which makes students get addicted and immerse in. They even use their phones during class, neglect their studies, and do not pay enough attention to the lecture, this leads to their bad academic performance at school. In addition, using phones raises the high rate of cyberbullying among pupils. By using phones, students can easily capture other classmates’ mistakes like failed performance, makeup, haircut, photos, etc, and share them on social media. Maybe, it is innocent jokes, but they will turn into brutal bullying and lead to serious problems such as committing suicide.
Even though there are several negative consequences phones bringing to students are discussed above, if students know to utilize them in the correct way, they can benefit from them. Phones give them entertainment and make them unwind during the break by listening to music and playing games. Moreover, if they do not understand the lecture before, they may find videos on youtube to have a better overview of the materials.
In conclusion, even though there are some benefits to bringing phones to school, I believe that they should be prohibited in class.
Please post essays, paragraphs, dialogues and other writing in the essay forum so a moderator does not have to move your post. Click on this link:
https://www.englishforums.com/English/EssayReportCompositionWriting/Forum9.htm
Next, tap on the green button "write a new post"
Please do not put the essay instructions in the "Subject" line.
Put it with your answer in the message body.
Subject: Please review my IELTS essay
Message body:
Topic: Copy the essay instructions accurately here. Your instructions have an error.
Cellphones should be banned in class. Do you agree or disagree?.
My essay:
(Your text here...)
---------------------
You are barely over the minimum word count. Aim to write 270-290 words for your task 2 essay.
Nowadays, cell phones have become popular and people carry them with them everywhere. in daily life and in school life as well. Nevertheless, it is assumed some people say that teachers should not allow students to use phones in class. In my viewpoint, ("Concur" is expressing a viewpoint. This phrase is redundant.) I firmly concur with the statement. (The examiner knows you are writing an essay. They know that you will be supporting your answer in the body paragraphs. This phrase is redundant.) for the following reasons.
First of all, phones should be prohibited in class because they distract students from studying. There are a lot of interesting applications, (wrong comma) and websites on phones, which will take the students' attention off of the teacher and the lesson. makes students get addicted and immerse in. (That is not grammatical. You have to focus on cell phone use in the classroom. Not everyday use. ) They even use their phones during class, neglect their studies, and do not pay enough attention to the lecture, They will lose track of what the teacher is saying, and not learn subject. This leads to their bad academic performance at school. In addition, using social media on phones can involve some of the children in raises the high rate of cyberbullying among pupils. (wrong word) By using phones, students can easily take pictures of capture other classmates’ mistakes like failed tests performance, ugly makeup, a bad haircut, or even a birth defect photos, etc, (Do not use "etc." in formal essays.) and share post them on social media. Maybe, the bully only meant it as it is innocent jokes, but they will their bad behaviour can turn into brutal bullying and lead to serious problems such as the target of the joke committing suicide.
When you agree that "cell phones have to be banned" do NOT write any reasons why they should be allowed. You destroy your essay's cohesion and coherence. You will get a very poor score. You must only write arguments that support your opinion. Delete the next paragraph. It does not belong in an opinion essay like this one.
Even though there are several negative consequences phones bringing to students are discussed above, (Ungrammatical) if students know to utilize them in the correct way, they can benefit from them. Phones give them entertainment and make them unwind during the break by listening to music and playing games. Moreover, if they do not understand the lecture before, they may find videos on youtube to have a better overview of the materials.
In conclusion, even though there are some benefits to bringing phones to school, because they contribute to poor grades and cyberbullying I believe that they should be prohibited in class.
