Can someone or teacher check my essay for me? I need it before tomorrow (Thursday). This is 5 paragraph essay and it on My hometown. I can't attch it on files so I'm going to copy and paste below it.

My Hometown

Everybody probably remembers their hometown. I am from Saigon, Vietnam. I came to Untied State when I was little. I do not really remember anything about my country because I came here when I was a little girl. I have lived in , for thirteen years ever since I came to . Since those thirteen years, I have not got a chance to go back my country, but if I do had chance to go there and visit, I would not want to go there, because it not a beautiful city like Saint Petersburg city. I have to say this, Saint Petersburg, Florida is a small and a beautiful city. It is so convenient in every way. It has so many places to go out and have fun with friends and family. It has so many restaurants and big super market. It is also surrounded by beaches, and the view is beautiful.

Saint Petersburg, Florida is located in South of Florida. It is in between north from Sarasota, and south from Tampa. It is also about 5 or 6 hours away from Miami, and also about 2 hours away from Orlando where all the theme parks are located. I have visited Orlando theme parks for several times and I love it there. The population in St. Petersburg, Florida is about 248,232 people. That may not be a big number compared to other cities but, even though it is a small city, it is really warm and there's lots of sunshine. People here are really friendly, and especially, my neighbors are really nice. They help my family out whenever we need them, and we usually exchange food. My mom cooks good food and sometimes, we brought it over to my neighbors to try it. They love it. People wave at my family and me and put have a big smile on their faces when they see us. It brightens up our day.

There are a lot of restaurants nearby my house and it is really convenient. There are some Asian restaurants about 15 or 20 minutes away from my house. I usually go eat with my friends, and we have a lot of fun there. Chik-Fil-A and Mcld restaurants are also next to the two bookstores. One is next to the Tyrone Mall, and the other one is across the Mall. My ex-boyfriend and my group of friend go to those bookstores once in a while to read book, studies and do our homework. Checkers, Mac ld, Taco Bell, Burger King, Kentucky Fried Chicken, Subway and Chik-Fil-A are fast food restaurant and are just around corner. Steakhouse and other Asian restaurant are around 10 or 15 minutes away from my ex-boyfriend house. The parks are really close here. We used to jog there in the morning around the park. Florida has beautiful beaches. Tourists come here to enjoy and relax. I usually go to Saint Petersburg, Florida Beach and Fort Desoto with my family and my friends. We do picnic and barbecue there during summer time. We play sports at the beach, and sit there and talk. Saint Petersburg beaches are great place to have picnic, go fishing, and hang out with friends. Beaches most of the time are surrounded by hotels. People come here to enjoy and relax. I love beaches. Sometimes, I hang out with my friends at the Starbucks coffee shop to sit there and chit chats, and goes eat at the restaurant next the beaches. The view is just amazing.

Tyrone Mall is 5 or 10 minutes away from my house. I go there shopping with my friend. The shopping mall is big and easy for me going back and forth. The mall is surrounded by a lot of restaurants. It makes me hungry every time when I am done shopping. Two big super Wal-marts are close by my house too. It is cheap and convenient. I go to the supermarket with my cousin on the weekend. There are also couples of Asian markets around. Whenever we need something, it only takes us 5 or 10 minutes to go and buy the stuff. Even Saint Petersburg, Florida is a small city, but it also has two big movie theaters and couples of colleges and a University here. They are just 15 or 20 minutes away from where I live.

In conclusion, Saint Petersburg, Florida is a small city, but it is so convenient in every way. It has so many restaurants and big supermarkets around. There is also a big shopping mall and University here. Saint Petersburg, Florida is famous for beaches, and I live next to them. I would encourage tourists come and visit my hometown because it is a beautiful and sunshine city. Saint Petersburg, Florida has so many places to go out and have fun with friends and family. It is also surrounded by beaches, and the view is beautiful. I am so grateful to live in this beautiful place.
I don't know how many responses you will get, because your "request" sounds more like an order, with all those exclamation points, "I need it before tomorrow" and no "please" or "thank you." We are all volunteers here, and we prefer to be asked nicely Emotion: smile rather than ordered around Emotion: indifferent. Thirteen years in the United States (not Untied State) should be long enough to learn to say "please" when you are asking for help.
I can't agree more!

Whether this is culture or individual, each one of us should learn to practice little common courtesy and manner when requesting help or favor. I can't stress it enough.

For some reason, I notice that "please" seems to be a difficult word to say in some non-English speaking countries. Could it be my imagination?Emotion: thinking