Topic: Young people today mostly learn by reading books or watching movies, rather than real-life experiences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?


In the inexorably changing world, it is obvious that there may be different ways indicating how people acquire knowledge. People argue that youngsters nowadays tend to learn more through books and films rather than achieve tacit knowledge which stems from their experiences in the real life. I totally agree with this point of view.


First of all, it cannot be denied that acquiring knowledge by reading books and watching movies is the best way for youngsters to understand better the differences between the real and unreal world. Not only may reading and watching frequently improve their rudimentary emotional skills, they also last later. They may know when they need to congrats someone, why they need to be sensitive, or what happens if they do not follow the law. Those things can be taught when they go through their own experiences, but they will absolutely not have the elemental understanding of those.


Moreover, learning practical knowledge through real-life experiences may not be efficient for someone who has difficulties in social communication. Youngsters nowadays usually find it hard to communicate with people they do not know well, and it is the rationale for why they often watch films or read specialized books. By reading and watching daily, they may get used to communicating effectively in order to reduce their fears and be better individuals through some scenes or stories related to common conversational situations before practicing.


In conclusion, while acquiring implicit knowledge is a good way for youngsters to develop themselves, it is clear that reading books and watching movies may give them a passport to more knowledge and skills achieved.

You have to work on revising the essays that you have already written, to learn from your mistakes.

Do not keep posting new essays. It is not a good strategy to learn how to get the best score.

In the inexorably changing today's world, it is obvious that there may be are many different ways indicating how people of acquiring knowledge. (You write too many words that are unnecessary and distracting. Verbosity is not an indicator of good clear communication. If you have too much "filler", it will reduce your score in coherence and cohesion as well as lexical resource. You are limiting your highest score to 6 level with all these extra words. ) People argue that youngsters (wrong word, too casual. A youngster in the US is a child aged between 7 and 12) nowadays tend to (unnecessary words) they learn more through books and films rather than achieve tacit knowledge which stems from (repetitious, wordy) their experiences in the real life. I totally agree with this point of view.

(Your essay was not on the right topic. You did not read the instructions carefully.

The task is NOT "What is the best way for young people to acquire knowledge?" That is the essay that you wrote.

The topic is: what do young people typically do today to acquire knowledge? Do they do passive activities like reading books and watching TV, or to they do active things like volunteer work, joining clubs, or talking to their elders? Are they learning in ways very different from the way their parents' generation learned?

The word "best" is not in the topic.

If you do not read the instructions very carefully, you will write the wrong essay. That means a low score on "task response".



First of all, it cannot be denied that (useless verbosity) acquiring knowledge by reading books and watching movies is the best way for youngsters (wrong vocabulary) to understand better the differences between the real and imaginary / make-believe unreal world. Not only may reading and watching frequently improve their rudimentary emotional (There are no emotional skills. There are computer programming or usage skills, writing skills and skills in playing games. These are activities that we do. We do not "do" emotions.) skills, they also last later. (wrong word) They may know when they need to congrats (wrong word - this is slang.) someone, why they need to be sensitive, or what happens if they do not follow the law. Those things can be taught when they go through their own experiences, but they will absolutely not have the elemental understanding of those. (wrong usage.)


Moreover, learning practical knowledge through real-life experiences may not be efficient for someone who has difficulties in social communication. Youngsters nowadays usually find it hard to communicate with people they do not know well, and it is the rationale for why they often watch films or read specialized books. (Give a specific example. What is the title of a "specialized" book that a young person can read for practical advice in communicating well? Is there a film or documentary that you or a friend of yours has read to gain valuable information? You have to eliminate verbosity and add practical, specific examples. ) By reading and watching daily, they may get used to communicating effectively (Your argument is not logical Reading and watching are passive activities. They are performed by one person. They do not involve any practice in communication with someone else. ) in order to reduce their fears and be better individuals through some scenes or stories related to common conversational situations before practicing. (That does not make sense. I lost your argument.)
In conclusion, while acquiring implicit (wrong word) knowledge is a good way for youngsters to develop themselves, it is clear that reading books and watching movies may give them a passport to more knowledge and skills achieved. (unnatural)